Talk:Anonymous people reveal animal cruelty at Australian Inghams poultry producer factory using CCTV footage

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Review of revision 1850112 [Not ready][edit]

  • Adding Wikinews links and Wikipedia links to aid in article clarity would be nice.
    • Done.
  • An information box would also be nice.
    • Not sure?
  • External links need to be removed from the article.
    • Done.
  • SMH should be spelled out for an international audience and then put into italics.
    • Done (not in italics, but still).
  • The lead should identify which abattoir in Sydney's south-west is involved.
    • Not done (I didn't find out...).
  • There should be greater use of active voice.
    • Done.
  • Beyond non-neutral words like shocking and distressing, this reads a bit like an Animal Liberation press release to push their agenda. Something needs to be done to address this.
    • Done.
  • A picture, while not required, would be nice.
    • Done.
  • An infobox, while not required, would be nice.

--Gryllida 05:16, 21 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Now found the place too.. --Gryllida 05:19, 21 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Review of revision 1850181 [Passed][edit]