Talk:Barcelona footballer Éric Abidal to undergo liver transplant

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Review of revision 1437090 [Passed] [edit]

Artículo bueno.svg Revision 1437090 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 06:00, 16 March 2012 (UTC).

Comments by reviewer:

  • Some passages were too close to source; avoid runs of more that three consecutive words from a source (with "common-sense" exceptions, like titles), also avoid copying distinctive turns of phrase, and seek to use different phrase/sentence structure.
  • The bigger problem (measured in word count, even) was failing to source most of the content of the second-to-last paragraph. Review choice was between finding the article not-ready; or ruthlessly deleting the unverified majority of the paragraph and publishing, thus starting a 24-hour clock to add sourced suitable replacement for the deleted text. For better or worse, I've chosen the latter course.
  • The article would definitely be stronger with some material in the middle of that second-to-last paragraph about the significance of Abidal to the team.
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