Talk:Crash Test Hunniez defeat Devotchkas in Roller Derby contest

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Notes[edit]

  • Arrived at the Morayfield Leisure Centre (27° 6′ 56.42″ S 152° 56′ 59.6″ E) at about 12:30pm local time (2:30 am UTC)
  • Watched two games before the focus of this article. Both have some coverage here.
    • There was another game payed before I arrived. but i haven't been able to locate a final score.
  • Rogues 312 d Team Pheonix 108
  • Murder Maids (Gold Coast) 194 d Range Renegades (Toowoomba) 95

CTH v Devotchkas[edit]

  • Match started at 4:09pm (6:09am UTC)
  • HT: CTH 146 Devotchkas 44
  • FT: CTH 275 Devotchkas 98

--RockerballAustralia c 02:26, 6 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Length[edit]

I'm hesitant about reviewing an article that consists of two sentences, considering most articles are required to have three paragraphs; I'm not sure the gallery is sufficient padding. There's also only one source. Microchip08 (talk) 03:44, 6 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I've added another paragraph to pad this out a bit. The one source thing shouldn't be a problem since this is Original Reporting. --RockerballAustralia c 06:15, 6 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I don't see length problems. I have issues with images lacking captions, so it's pretty hard to understand the timing and ingredients of the event. (The latter may be an issue with only me, as I lack basic sport events background many readers could already have.) Gryllida 08:24, 6 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Done -RockerballAustralia c 09:10, 6 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I'm glad the second paragraph is there. Still, the text is clearly below minimal; I've tentatively marked this as a photo essay.
At first view, I'm not happy with the sourcing either; we generally try to have corroborating material. Amongst its other functions, it helps gauge newsworthiness. I'm still considering, as I move forward with the review. --Pi zero (talk) 12:11, 6 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I note this page (the reporter might have turned this up): Devotchkas | Facebook --Pi zero (talk) 12:21, 6 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]
How did I miss this I wonder? --RockerballAustralia c 12:32, 6 April 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Review of revision 2527977 [Passed][edit]

Revision 2527977 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 13:12, 6 April 2014 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • See my remarks above.
  • As best I can tell, "Crash Test Honiez" has no web presence, but "Crash Test Hunniez" — the spelling on the Devotchkas' fb page — turns up some clearly relevant matches. So I'm going with the latter spelling.
  • I like that this gives (appropriately for a photo essay) a feeling for the event. (Crowd in the "suicide seating", indeed. :-)
  • Atm I'm not thinking of a way to make the headline more specific without also making it substantially more verbose and less punchy; so, if another event should come along also fitting this headline, we'll let the later article figure out what to do about it. :-)

The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 2527977 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 13:12, 6 April 2014 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • See my remarks above.
  • As best I can tell, "Crash Test Honiez" has no web presence, but "Crash Test Hunniez" — the spelling on the Devotchkas' fb page — turns up some clearly relevant matches. So I'm going with the latter spelling.
  • I like that this gives (appropriately for a photo essay) a feeling for the event. (Crowd in the "suicide seating", indeed. :-)
  • Atm I'm not thinking of a way to make the headline more specific without also making it substantially more verbose and less punchy; so, if another event should come along also fitting this headline, we'll let the later article figure out what to do about it. :-)
The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.
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