Talk:Former U.S. Senator Norm Coleman diagnosed with Bell's palsy

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Notes[edit]

A full interview is supposed to be released on Sunday, Sept. 13, the launch date of the site. Calebrw (talk) 02:58, 11 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

One line paragraphs?[edit]

Can any of the sentences be merged together? 75.72.27.74 (talk) (→Zachary) 04:15, 11 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Review of revision 880624 [Failed][edit]

Revision 880624 of this article has been reviewed by Cirt (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 21:34, 11 September 2009 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: Way too much use of dashes in sentences - which makes for awkward wording - but only if you have trouble pausing - way too much - in the middle of reading - the article. Last sentence of first paragraph begins with "And...".

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Revision 880624 of this article has been reviewed by Cirt (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 21:34, 11 September 2009 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: Way too much use of dashes in sentences - which makes for awkward wording - but only if you have trouble pausing - way too much - in the middle of reading - the article. Last sentence of first paragraph begins with "And...".

Questions about the above? Ask.

If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Thanks for the comments Cirt. I'll do what I can to fix the problems. I'll see if I can't find a second source, but this was an exclusive, but has most likely been picked up on other local media outlets. Calebrw (talk) 23:27, 11 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Think I got it fixed up nicely. Removed some em dashes and added a second source. Calebrw (talk) 23:40, 11 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Comment: I still don't see the need for the use of dashes in the first and second paragraphs. Cirt (talk) 03:31, 12 September 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Review of revision 880946 [Passed][edit]

Revision 880946 of this article has been reviewed by Cirt (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 06:26, 12 September 2009 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: I did some minor copyediting and formatting.

The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 880946 of this article has been reviewed by Cirt (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 06:26, 12 September 2009 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: I did some minor copyediting and formatting.

The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.
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