Talk:Four people shot in parking lot of Wal-Mart store north of Austin, Texas

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Some initial sources on this item

All this sources of a distinct lack of details in common; however here are coomon key points:

  1. The shooting took place in a Cedar_Park,_Texas Walmart
  2. Four people were shot
  3. All injuries were non-life-threatening
  4. Cedar Park Police Capt. Mike Harmon said authorities arrived around 4:30AM local time
  5. The suspect was also injured and hospitalized, being arrested at the scene.
  6. Soloman Onwukaife was charged with aggravated assault with a deadly weapon and is 18 years old
  7. Nothing will keep a Walmart closed, it re-opened later the same morning.

--Mozillaman (talk) 00:03, 20 August 2012 (UTC)

"All of these sources seem to share a lack of specific details in common." Can't seem to English today. Anyways, last link contains the most detail but is a single source. --Mozillaman (talk) 00:04, 20 August 2012 (UTC)

Wal-Mart is now Walmart[edit]

Not sure if anyone will care about the hyphen; but Wal-Mart stores are all Walmart stores since 2008.

Review of revision 1593256 [Not ready][edit]

  • Trimmed down the lead and re-factored pretty much everything in this revision to hopefully improve readability and also minimize copyright issues. "Gunshots rang out" was also removed. FM is "Farm-to-Market"; I almost included it spelled out in this revision but a local would never use "Farm-to-Market" and I'm not sure spelling it out is strictly needed. Feel free to replace it with "Farm-to-Market" if you feel it would be a dramatic help. --Mozillaman (talk) 13:34, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
The close paraphrase was my fault, I was tired, lazy or both at the time. I took out FM.....I'm very loosely familiar with the area, and listing the Highway is good enough, considering location. Mozillaman, I thought you were the heck would you know what "locals" might never say?? :] --Bddpaux (talk) 16:27, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
  • Talked to a more southerly friend for advice ;) --Mozillaman (talk) 16:58, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
I'm going to re-review this now. At-issue isn't what the locals might say, it is making it clear to an international audience. Here in the UK we'd call that a Farmer's Market, although I'm sure there are other names that might be more-apt for an international audience. --Brian McNeil / talk 12:48, 22 August 2012 (UTC)

Review of revision 1594638 [Passed][edit]

photo ?[edit]

Why does this story contain a photo of a Kahr pistol? Was one used in the shooting? If not, it should be removed, or else we should also add file photos of a Walmart and of a party where alcohol is being served. - (talk) 20:02, 22 August 2012 (UTC)

  • Removed. No need to offer the hyperbole in terms of a challenge. --Brian McNeil / talk 20:15, 22 August 2012 (UTC)