Talk:Man starts car collision at Liverpool FC trophy parade
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[edit]I added quoted wording hopefully not going to hurt review process. Otherwise I put into my own words throughout the text. Thank you. BigKrow (talk) 22:13, 26 May 2025 (UTC)
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[edit]| Q | A | Comment | action needed? | |
|---|---|---|---|---|
| 5w | Who | x | ||
| 5w | Where | country unspecified | i added country considering it a minor edit | |
| 5w | Why | Dunno | ||
| 5w | When | x | ||
| 5w | What | x | ||
| 5w | How | x | ||
| d | Event date = | May 26 | 6 days ago | |
| (c) | There is no plagiarism. | x | ||
| p1 | The first paragraph answers the 5W. | x | ||
| pp | The text is written neutrally, without unfairly representing or praising one side. | x | ||
| pp | The content is written in past tense. | x | unit's -> units; are -> were | i made these minor corrections |
| h | The headline is in active voice. | x | ||
| h | The headline is in present tense. | x | ||
| pp | inverted pyramid | x | ||
| style | wikilinks are present | x | ||
| style | infobox is present | - | missing | i added 'England' infobox |
| style | image is present | - | ||
| style | categories are defined | x | ||
| style | sources are filled in | x | ||
| style | fresh sources are listed at the top of the list | x | ||
| v | at least two sources are listed, and they are not paywalled | x |
Gryllida (talk, live chat) 10:13, 1 June 2025 (UTC)
Review of revision 4861321 [Passed]
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Revision 4861321 of this article has been reviewed by Gryllida (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 10:17, 1 June 2025 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Hi @George Ho @Wikiwide @BigKrow @Lofi Gurl @Back ache @Md Mobashir Hossain @Almondo2025, @Dsuke1998AEOS, @Ternera, @Monsieur2137 @Asked42, @Sheminghui.WU, @excelblue (if you want yourself removed or someone else added to this list, please inquire here) A revision has been requested. Here is a list of what to do. (If/when you intend to start working on it, please Subscribe to this section and to this talk page, and post reply messages here when you started and finished editing) See below: Hi User:BigKrow, please check the feedback above. Is this format of feedback more helpful than a paragraph written here? Please confirm. My feedback for here: I needed to make minor edits to add country; add infobox; change to past tense in one occurrence; merge multiple sentences into more coherent paragraphs. I noted that '6 days old' is barely fresh anymore, with current policies allowing '5 to 7 days' old to be considered stale, and I erred on the '7 days' side, meaning that '6 days old' is not stale. I ask you to please add any fresh details NOW, such as number of people injured, charges which were filed, and so on; please add these changes within less than 24 hours from now. Click the 'Ask' link below if you have any questions or suggested edits; suggested edits may be made within up to 24 hours of publication. Thank you. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Revision 4861321 of this article has been reviewed by Gryllida (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 10:17, 1 June 2025 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Hi @George Ho @Wikiwide @BigKrow @Lofi Gurl @Back ache @Md Mobashir Hossain @Almondo2025, @Dsuke1998AEOS, @Ternera, @Monsieur2137 @Asked42, @Sheminghui.WU, @excelblue (if you want yourself removed or someone else added to this list, please inquire here) A revision has been requested. Here is a list of what to do. (If/when you intend to start working on it, please Subscribe to this section and to this talk page, and post reply messages here when you started and finished editing) See below: Hi User:BigKrow, please check the feedback above. Is this format of feedback more helpful than a paragraph written here? Please confirm. My feedback for here: I needed to make minor edits to add country; add infobox; change to past tense in one occurrence; merge multiple sentences into more coherent paragraphs. I noted that '6 days old' is barely fresh anymore, with current policies allowing '5 to 7 days' old to be considered stale, and I erred on the '7 days' side, meaning that '6 days old' is not stale. I ask you to please add any fresh details NOW, such as number of people injured, charges which were filed, and so on; please add these changes within less than 24 hours from now. Click the 'Ask' link below if you have any questions or suggested edits; suggested edits may be made within up to 24 hours of publication. Thank you. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Hi @George Ho @Wikiwide @BigKrow @Lofi Gurl @Back ache @Md Mobashir Hossain @Almondo2025, @Dsuke1998AEOS, @Ternera, @Monsieur2137 @Asked42, @Sheminghui.WU, @excelblue
1) Please see above.
Thanks, -- Gryllida (talk, live chat) 10:29, 1 June 2025 (UTC)
Article title
[edit]The current title, "Man starts car collision at Liverpool FC trophy parade", is not neutral (we do not know how it was started) and does not convey the scale of the incident. It needs to be something like "Dozens of pedestrians injured as car crashes into the crowd after Liverpool FC trophy parade". DeFacto (talk) 14:06, 1 June 2025 (UTC)