Talk:New South Wales state MP Glenn Brookes moves to crossbench over electoral allegations

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Review of revision 4200979 [Not ready][edit]

Revision 4200979 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 12:26, 22 March 2016 (UTC).[reply]

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  • Verifiability: Not ready: There's only one recent source; we want at least two mutually independent sources corroborating the focal event.
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Revision 4200979 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 12:26, 22 March 2016 (UTC).[reply]
  • Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues.
  • Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues.
  • Verifiability: Not ready: There's only one recent source; we want at least two mutually independent sources corroborating the focal event.
  • NPOV: Not ready: Calling a campaign "slanderous" in our words (I'm hoping that's not somebody else's words copied, which would be plagiarism) violates our neutrality policy; see WN:PILLARS#neutral, WN:Attribute.
  • Style: Not ready: No external links in the body of an article, per the Wikinews:Style guide; the body should only contain wikilinks (to either Wikinews or a sister project such as Wikipedia), using {{w}}.

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Review of revision 4201157 [Not ready][edit]

Revision 4201157 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 01:09, 23 March 2016 (UTC).[reply]

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  • The list of sources still has only one recent source, and there are still external links in the body of the article. See the previous review.

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Revision 4201157 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 01:09, 23 March 2016 (UTC).[reply]
  • Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues.
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  • Verifiability: Not ready: See below.
  • NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues.
  • Style: Not ready: See below.

Comments by reviewer:

  • The list of sources still has only one recent source, and there are still external links in the body of the article. See the previous review.

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Status[edit]

Honestly, I'd hoped I might review this on Wednesday (UTC). I'm unsure of the status of the focus here, notably re corroboration and freshness, which would be points of interest to me in a review; and certainly having missed Wednesday can't help the freshness. (Alas, it's quite late where I am — on the opposite side of the world from NSW — and I'm not able to undertake a nontrivial review for at least the next nine hours or so.) --Pi zero (talk) 02:23, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I've taken a preliminary look at this; there are two outstanding issues I have my eye on, and I'm ready to start the source-check phase of review (the most intensive part).
  • The phrase "move to the cross bench" won't mean anything to many international readers who don't live in a country with a parliament (which includes a large number of readers in the US); clarification is needed.
  • Looking at the structure of the first sentence of the currently-third paragraph, it seems to say that Brookes made this denial while in the process of winning the district by 0.8 percent; there's something odd there that needs a rephrase for clarity. I suspect the intent was merely to weave in the fact that Brookes had won by a small margin.
At this moment, I need to take a break; hopefully, if someone else doesn't get to the article in the meanwhile, I can take it up again sometime in the next few hours (morning, here). --Pi zero (talk) 11:48, 24 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Review of revision 4201546 [Passed][edit]

Revision 4201546 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 18:16, 24 March 2016 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • This is barely allowable within usual parameters for freshness.
  • See the detailed history of edits during review.
  • I had difficulty accessing the most recent Daily Telegraph source because it was paywalled as 'premium content'. Fortunately I was able to access it, as the paywall was somewhat ambivalent in its blockage; but please be careful about this, going forward, as it could have sabotaged the whole review. (Similarly, don't use the New York Times as a source on Wikinews as it's regionally paywalled; The Australian is also a problem, and often The Wall Street Journal.)

The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 4201546 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 18:16, 24 March 2016 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • This is barely allowable within usual parameters for freshness.
  • See the detailed history of edits during review.
  • I had difficulty accessing the most recent Daily Telegraph source because it was paywalled as 'premium content'. Fortunately I was able to access it, as the paywall was somewhat ambivalent in its blockage; but please be careful about this, going forward, as it could have sabotaged the whole review. (Similarly, don't use the New York Times as a source on Wikinews as it's regionally paywalled; The Australian is also a problem, and often The Wall Street Journal.)
The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.
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