Talk:U.S. teens generally reducing risky behavior says CDC

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• I'm reading through the website - so far most of what I've covered can be sourced to the "history of participation" and "sex subgroups" pages, as well as the press release. Chris Mann (Say hi!|Stalk me!) 04:26, 5 June 2008 (UTC)

Comments

I do not like this sentence: However, Hispanic teens showed greater prevalence of many behaviors than their white and black counterparts, and had not made as much progress in several key areas. Prevalence of what behaviors? What marks progress? In the 60s many would probably have said more sex, more drugs, more rock is progress. --SVTCobra 01:32, 7 June 2008 (UTC)

It's meant to relate to the previous sentence, where it mentions a decrease in the amount of risk-taking behaviour and, I thought, equated that with "progress". It's also related to the quote at the end of the article, where Howell Weschler directly ties "avoiding things that put their health in danger" to progress. As to the "many behaviors" where Hispanics show greater prevalence, that's discussed in part later in the article and then mostly on the CDC site. I agree "many" or even "several" sounds a bit weaselly, so I'll try to reword it. I welcome any suggestions as to how to do it. Chris Mann (Say hi!|Stalk me!) 05:15, 10 June 2008 (UTC)

I rewrote that sentence. See if you think it is OK. --SVTCobra 00:04, 11 June 2008 (UTC)