Talk:University, Noosa play for home Sunshine Coast rugby major semi in 2014

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--RockerballAustralia contribs 23:45, 23 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Lede[edit]

Not a proper lede. --Pi zero (talk) 23:45, 23 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Well... not as bad as it could be. Makes me uncomfortable, though. --Pi zero (talk) 00:10, 24 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Trying something I've learnt at university. I've tried doing what is called a delayed intro. Any suggestions on how to improve it. --RockerballAustralia contribs 01:16, 24 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]
I've simplified it a little, under the presumption is that the reader is not very focused and skimming the first 1-2 paragraphs should easily deliver the key detail. --Gryllida 11:32, 24 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]
A week early Gryllida. Semi's arn't 'til next week. (/me wonders whether I communicated that effectively in innitial submit). Easy enough to get confused. Final round games were at the same venues, feature the exact same teams that will be playing there next week. --RockerballAustralia contribs 12:19, 24 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Ah. Okay. --Pi zero (talk) 15:25, 24 August 2014 (UTC)[reply]

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