Talk:2008 Computex Preview: A decisive battle for IT industry and trade show quality

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I participated the pre-show press conference in Wednesday (April 30), the two executives pointed out several key sectors in it, I also did a proper recording in this conference, and I uploaded them into Commons and put it here. When C/E, read carefully on several sources and my audio recordings. Brock contact... 07:52, 3 May 2008 (UTC)

Style[edit]

Quotes need a little adjusting to fit properly on the page. Not sure how to do that so can someone else take a look at that? DragonFire1024 (Talk to the Dragon) 19:46, 3 May 2008 (UTC)

Not ready yet[edit]

  1. First 2 paragraphs are awkwardly worded. Specifically, 2nd and 3rd sentences of first paragraph. Cirt - (talk) 22:01, 3 May 2008 (UTC)
Done DragonFire1024 (Talk to the Dragon) 03:16, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
  1. First sentence of 2nd paragraph uses word "showcased" twice. Cirt - (talk) 22:01, 3 May 2008 (UTC)
Done DragonFire1024 (Talk to the Dragon) 03:19, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
  1. Last sentence of 2nd paragraph is a bit long and run-on. Cirt - (talk) 22:01, 3 May 2008 (UTC)
Done DragonFire1024 (Talk to the Dragon) 03:19, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
  1. Not sure who the first blockquote is attributed to. Cirt - (talk) 22:01, 3 May 2008 (UTC)
    • If those two are chained, like this: 1st - ....., 2nd - ...... by xxx, two blockquotes were spoken by the same one. Should two blockquotes be combined for chain? Brock contact... 05:26, 4 May 2008 (UTC)
      • I did a arrangement, its current style may be OK. Brock contact... 05:34, 4 May 2008 (UTC)
  2. The article in general is basically one big blockquote, which isn't the best way to go here. Cirt - (talk) 22:01, 3 May 2008 (UTC)
    • Should this article be deleted or simplified? Brock contact... 11:09, 4 May 2008 (UTC)
  3. 3rd blockquote also appears to be unattributed. Cirt - (talk) 22:01, 3 May 2008 (UTC)
    • I deleted those blockquotes and merged into main introduction, it should be re-checked up, that is, three issues above has been solved. Brock contact... 03:24, 7 May 2008 (UTC)

These issues should be addressed before publishing. Cirt - (talk) 22:01, 3 May 2008 (UTC)

Article still has some issues[edit]

  1. Title of the article is unclear/awkwardly worded - should be renamed. Cirt - (talk) 03:30, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
    • I use "Decisive Battle" because a foreign press ever questioned Walter about a DAMN sensitive issue about transportation and exhibition space. Why can't be named like its style on Apple Daily in Taiwan? Brock contact... 09:26, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
Done I think. DragonFire1024 (Talk to the Dragon) 03:21, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
  1. 1st 2 sentences of 1st paragraph are too long. Cirt - (talk) 03:30, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
Done DragonFire1024 (Talk to the Dragon) 03:22, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
  1. 2nd paragraph is one, big, run-on sentence. Cirt - (talk) 03:30, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
Done I think I solved that. DragonFire1024 (Talk to the Dragon) 03:24, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
  1. I am unclear as to the meaning of the 2 sentences in the 3rd paragraph, not sure how best to copy-edit there or what to suggest. Cirt - (talk) 03:30, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
Done I think. DragonFire1024 (Talk to the Dragon)
  1. 4th paragraph is also a run-on sentence. Cirt - (talk) 03:30, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
Done DragonFire1024 (Talk to the Dragon) 03:30, 9 May 2008 (UTC)
  1. Not sure as to the meaning of the 5th paragraph. Cirt - (talk) 03:30, 7 May 2008 (UTC)
Done I think. DragonFire1024 (Talk to the Dragon) 03:30, 9 May 2008 (UTC)