Talk:Israeli army kills three Egyptians in border incident

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Looks okay for publishing - TalkHard 10:23, 18 Nov 2004 (UTC)

The content looks OK, but the headline needs to change. Who or what is Israel? Israeli army, Israli tank etc.--Eloquence 10:37, 18 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Headline needs to change, and preferably the first line also. Ambi 12:39, 18 Nov 2004 (UTC)

Neutrality Issue[edit]

The title (Israeli army kills three Egyptians in border incident) is better now, but I think it is not good yet (potencial Not Neutral Point of View problem). It seems it was an accident (however I am not saying we must change incident to accident in title):

  • An Israeli tank apparently mistook Egyptian troops for Palestinian fighters.
  • Foreign ministry spokesman Mark Regev has apologized for the inicident

We are not sure whether Israel wanted have killed them of intention or not.

Second: Do Egyptian soldiers reacted? Or it was an execution?

I think 'border incident' is neutral language which attributes blame to no one. On Egyptian soldiers reacting, there is nothing in there about Egyption actions, and the idea that Israelis killed them is being reported by Israeli officials, so I think that is far more supportable than Israel claiming Egypt attacked them or Egypt claiming Israel attacked them. Seems like an OK balance between timeliness and comprehensiveness to me, as the information just wasn't out there when I wrote it. --119 14:47, 18 Nov 2004 (UTC)

We can't say ourselves it was an accident, but we can't say ourselves Israel had executed them. We must be neutral, the more we can.

Well based on what I've seen I think it's very supportable to say it appears to be unintentional, but not verified, so "apparently" is in there. --119 14:47, 18 Nov 2004 (UTC)

If you find a better title at least I will approve the article.

--carlosar Nov 18 14:13:08 UTC 2004

The article is good. I don't like the title very much, but I think it is acceptable.--carlosar Nov 18 17:41:58 UTC 2004