Talk:MT duo & Robot Taiwan 2008: Vast opportunities for machinery industry

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I visited these 2 shows yesterday and just do necessity recording and picture-taking for this report. Brock contact... 08:55, 2 May 2008 (UTC)

Not ready to be published yet[edit]

  1. The first paragraph has major problems - it is basically one overly long sentence. It is okay to have the first paragraph consist of one sentence, but not this long and run-on. Cirt - (talk) 14:14, 2 May 2008 (UTC)
    Cornflower blue check.svg Issue addressed A101 - (talk) 16:38, 2 May 2008 (UTC)
  2. 2nd paragraph is also one sentence, and is also a long run-on sentence which is not too clear. Cirt - (talk) 14:14, 2 May 2008 (UTC)
    Cornflower blue check.svg Issue addressed --A101 - (talk) 16:49, 2 May 2008 (UTC)
  3. Also run-on issues with the next 2 paragraphs, albeit not as bad as the first 2. Cirt - (talk) 14:14, 2 May 2008 (UTC)
    Cornflower blue check.svg Issue addressed --A101 - (talk) 16:49, 2 May 2008 (UTC)

Copyedit[edit]

I have tried to copyedit the article. COuld someone please check the diff to check that I did not delete any important info or misrepresent a fact. A101 - (talk) 16:50, 2 May 2008 (UTC)

Still minor problems[edit]

The 2008 Taipei CNC Machine Tools & Manufacturing Technology Show (MT duo) and Taiwan International Robot Exhibition (Robot Taiwan 2008) both yesterday. These events are both taking place in the build up to Taipei International Machine Tool Show (TIMTOS 2009) at TWTC Nangang, which is die to take place next year.

The first sentence, is, um, actually a sentence fragment. The second sentence doesn't make sense. What is the "die" in "... die to take place..." supposed to mean? Unclear. Cirt - (talk) 16:58, 2 May 2008 (UTC)