Talk:Lightning strikes kill three in Mumbai
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[edit] Review of revision 886455 [Failed]
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Revision 886455 of this article has been reviewed by ShakataGaNai (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 06:13, 24 September 2009 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Neither the title of this article, nor the first paragraph, explain why we (the reader) cares. In fact right now it reads as if the article is saying "Everything is normal". Why is this special? If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
[edit] Review of revision 886556 [Passed]
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Revision 886556 of this article has been reviewed by Tempodivalse (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 12:56, 24 September 2009 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Did some copyedit work, looks good enough to publish. One note, though: please be careful to make your sentences different from your sources - before i rephrased it, a few places from this article sounded quite similar to the sources. Otherwise a good article. Tempodivalse [talk] 12:56, 24 September 2009 (UTC) The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
