Talk:Pakistan's military offensive suspended for Ramadan

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Revision 686845 of this article has been reviewed by ShakataGaNai (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 00:49, 1 September 2008 (UTC).[reply]

  • Copyright: Passed
  • Newsworthiness: Passed
  • Verifiability: Passed
  • NPOV: Passed
  • Style: Not ready: Needs cats, could use C/E ('it's Military Offensive' -> 'its military offensive' for ex) , "The government has faced political turbulence at the same time" - Is this important? How so? What kind of turbulence?

Comments by reviewer: Short, and a bit confusing one part it says they are 'suspending offensive' and another mentions a 'ceasefire'. IMHO one is not the same as the other. Generally ceasefire's are mutual. --ShakataGaNai ^_^ 00:49, 1 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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Revision 686845 of this article has been reviewed by ShakataGaNai (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 00:49, 1 September 2008 (UTC).[reply]
  • Copyright: Passed
  • Newsworthiness: Passed
  • Verifiability: Passed
  • NPOV: Passed
  • Style: Not ready: Needs cats, could use C/E ('it's Military Offensive' -> 'its military offensive' for ex) , "The government has faced political turbulence at the same time" - Is this important? How so? What kind of turbulence?

Comments by reviewer: Short, and a bit confusing one part it says they are 'suspending offensive' and another mentions a 'ceasefire'. IMHO one is not the same as the other. Generally ceasefire's are mutual. --ShakataGaNai ^_^ 00:49, 1 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Questions about the above? Ask.

If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

I do not believe in beating around the bush. I think that if the reader wants more details than the condensed version I wrote, they can simply look up the sources. But, that's my opinion. I won't really expand the article unless more information comes up. Mgray (talk) 01:32, 1 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I have done a complete rewrite, so no further work can be done on this by me. I hope it informs a bit more now. --Saqib (talk) 05:03, 1 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Review 2[edit]

Revision 686926 of this article has been reviewed by ShakataGaNai (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 06:33, 1 September 2008 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: Looks much better. Someone could c/e with fine tooth comb, but nothing major stands out. --ShakataGaNai ^_^ 06:33, 1 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 686926 of this article has been reviewed by ShakataGaNai (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 06:33, 1 September 2008 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: Looks much better. Someone could c/e with fine tooth comb, but nothing major stands out. --ShakataGaNai ^_^ 06:33, 1 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.
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