Talk:Batavia Air 737 loses piece of wing in flight, lands safely

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Weasel words[edit]

I think the last paragraph should be reworked a bit, especially this bit: "This has been blamed by many on deregulation..." It is a bit weasely. Jcart1534 20:58, 22 November 2007 (UTC)Reply[reply]

I've tried to rewrite it a bit. I didn't reread the last paragraph since I'm struggling with a rediculously small laptop keyboard that I'll be using a lot now, and wanted to be gone on the hour. Someone should still check it over, though. Blood Red Sandman (Talk) (Contribs) 21:16, 22 November 2007 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I think it looks fine now, Blood Red Sandman. I made some minor changes. Cheers, Jcart1534 21:52, 22 November 2007 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Size of segment[edit]

The stories that originate with Associated Press say the piece is 1.5m by 2.0m, stories that originate with Reuters say 40cm by 50cm. That's a huge difference, should we point out the discrepency in our story or do we have a reason to believe that 40 by 50 is correct. Both cite Indonesian officials. --SVTCobra 22:40, 22 November 2007 (UTC)Reply[reply]

I renamed the article to be more generic in terms of the size of piece and edited the associated reference in the article (used "up to two metres"). Hopefully that works? Jcart1534 23:08, 22 November 2007 (UTC)Reply[reply]