Talk:Lakewood Police & SWAT team end standoff with tear gas

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I gathered the information by speaking with Lakewood Police and SWAT Members, as well as photos that I shot of the occurrence. Dlayphoto 03:50, 23 January 2007 (UTC)

some fixes needed[edit]

  1. the "man became hostile" needs to be attributed.
  2. am not sure about the "implode" bit either - does an implosion happen if a (pressurised) gas tank is blown up?
  3. "sent in a robot, attempting to dialogue" sounds odd - a robot carrying a radio or somesuch? why not use the phone? or it "robot sent in. dialog was also attempted."?
  4. "as if to taunt the officers" sounds speculative, lets try to avoid ascribing motives ourselves.
  5. have removed the address of the residence, do not think it serves a purpose.
  6. any possibility of getting photos of the incident?

 — Doldrums(talk) 04:07, 23 January 2007 (UTC)

I have photos of the incident in my Flickr. Dlayphoto 04:14, 23 January 2007 (UTC)

i've you are willing to release the images under a CCA license, then u can upload the images (just follow the 'Upload free media' link in the navigation section in the menu on the left) and use them in the articles.  — Doldrums(talk) 04:55, 23 January 2007 (UTC)

Just uploaded a photo.Dlayphoto 05:09, 23 January 2007 (UTC)