Talk:Iran-Pakistan pipeline at risk

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Review of revision 2109246 [Not ready][edit]

Let me see.........[edit]

....if I can provide a touch of clarity here (although Pi Zero did an excellent job of doing exactly that above): The 3rd sentence is a very good jumping off point for your lede. News items where there is much ado about something can be tricky. Remember: we report on news events. So, you sometimes have to fine-tune your article to focus on an event. You can go with:"A bunch of people are saying this big project isn't going to work out.", but you have to focus on AN EVENT. Someone released a press notice on Thursday.....there's a good solid event for the lede. Then, what this guy said, that guy said and the other guy said can be reserved for later paragraphs, that serve to shore up the LARGER issue.--Bddpaux (talk) 16:18, 1 November 2013 (UTC)

Review of revision 2113710 [Passed][edit]

  • The headline ended up a bit a bit on the generic side. There's always something, I know; just saying. --Pi zero (talk) 13:16, 2 November 2013 (UTC)