Talk:Presenter Derek Batey dies at age 84

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Review notes[edit]

I am on my iPad and at the moment I am not up to watching video. Much of the article appears to need to be substantiated by the video but the existing text was not plagiarised from available text sources. It supports the text. The article is neutral. It appears to be written in a pyramid style. (I might have opted for the quotes before large background but I can see how this works better.) There are no obvius grammatical problems. The quote is supported. There are two sources supporting the substantial point of his death. If some one could watch the video to make sure the second paragraph is adequately supported, then I believe it is ready for publishing. --LauraHale (talk) 05:25, 20 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I must apologise to the reviewer about some of the details in this article. Unfortunately, the two sources contradict each other at points. --Rayboy8 (my talk) (my contributions) 09:54, 20 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Review of revision 1815166 [Passed][edit]