Talk:US Student reveals book visit a hoax
Add topicWe need to publish this, as we published the original, but I don't like a number of points. First, I hate all these "Sensationalist Blah: blah blah" titles. Second, I think the langauge is POV in a number of places, mostly at the beinning & end of paragraphs. For example, the first paragraph shouldn't just end with "... was a lie." Finally, there are real solid stories about the large number of U.S. wiretaps of U.S. citizens communicating with people in other countries. This should be given one sentence to help explain the legs this story got. Nyarlathotep 21:01, 24 December 2005 (UTC)
P.S. I was personally visited by the FBI over a spelling mistake[1]. :)
How about "Student reviles his claim of a visit by U.S. federal agent visit over a library book as a hoax". Its obnoxiously long, but it seems to capture everything? Anyone got anything shorter?
- How about "US Student reveals book visit a hoax" ? --Chiacomo (talk) 21:07, 24 December 2005 (UTC)
- Good enough! Nyarlathotep 21:08, 24 December 2005 (UTC)
- How about "US Student reveals book visit a hoax" ? --Chiacomo (talk) 21:07, 24 December 2005 (UTC)
I tried to fix some of the language, lets see what everyone thinks. Nyarlathotep 21:08, 24 December 2005 (UTC)