Talk:Police describe bloody evidence in NY Sen. Monserrate assault trial

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I really think the title on this needs shortened. The only way I can currently see to do so is to drop the detail that it is a "state" Senator, drop the first name, and keep the NY abbreviation. --Brian McNeil / talk 03:06, 1 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Cirt (talk) 03:08, 1 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

In the last paragraph I believe to maintain independence on the eventual court outcome the article should read "Senate weeks after the alleged conflict with Giraldo" rather than "Senate weeks after the conflict with Giraldo". —Preceding unsigned comment added by 213.65.42.73 (talk) 20:17, 2 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Done You're quite right on that one Blood Red Sandman (Talk) (Contribs) 20:37, 2 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Looks good. Cirt (talk) 20:43, 2 October 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Review of revision 889825 [Passed][edit]