User talk:Symode09/Speech
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I have no idea what this speech is for, or who you are speaking to. Anyways, I thought i'd give my thoughts (constructive critism) on it as i saw it on recent changes, and I like unsolicitedly commenting on things. (But this is your speech, for some purpose I am totally unaware of, so my thoughts quite possibly are invalid as i don't really know the context).
I'm not sure which audience you are presenting to, but be careful with that last line. Depending on what your audience is, they may interpert that differently then you intend.
- Msn isn't really a brand associated with news, perhaps saying a generic internet portal, or mentioning some other news website would be more effective. I'm not 100% sure if Firstly is a real word, maybe First of all, or primarily would be better. You may want to go into more detail on how wikinews is better depending on audience.
Now, many people say how fair and balanced fox news is, I thought I might test how they treat professionals who they are interviewing. (play video 2) |
Be careful about ganging up too much on fox (although again this depends on audience).
- First, Wikinews video has been publicly announced before (Wikinews:Broadcast, previous wikinews video stuff), so it isn't the first announcement. "it will be the first free and unfree video news to be available on so many mediums." Something can't be both free and unfree. I highly doubt it will be on the most mediums of anything. In fact I only count two mediums on that list, and I know news that has been published in more mediums then that (RSS feeds and podcast are essentially the same. Youtube msn video, commons, Google video, and what have you are all the same posting on an internet site to be viewed as a webpage).Bawolff ☺☻ 21:10, 26 October 2007 (UTC)