Talk:Abbott open to possible Australian assistance in Iraq

Review of revision 2688708 [Not ready]

Revision 2688708 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 13:25, 14 June 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not ready: See below. NPOV: Not ready: See below. Style: Not ready: See below. Comments by reviewer: The Iraq situation is, of course, of great interest, and what Abbott has to say about it is of much interest. However, in order to cover it one has to be clear and precise, and it's probably wise to write in a way that's somewhat robust against further developments (a tactic mentioned for breaking stories in WN:Newsworthiness). The headline is misleading in a sensationalist way; from the sources, he hinted, he said he might consider, he did not rule out, which falls far short of 'offering military assistance in Iraq'. The first sentence of the lede doesn't describe something than happened at all; it only says that something didn't happen. The second sentence of the lede talks about a "pledge", but no pledge has been described. There is also no answer to basic question when in the lede; and while a reviewer may somethings fix an otherwise okay lede by smoothly inserting a "day" word, ("yesterday", "on Friday", etc.), in this case the lede already has this focus problem I found too fundamental to "just fix". In fact, Obama has now ruled out at least one option. That doesn't necessarily preclude reporting on what Abbott said before Obama said that, but the way one reports it should be modulated. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 2688708 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 13:25, 14 June 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not ready: See below. NPOV: Not ready: See below. Style: Not ready: See below. Comments by reviewer: The Iraq situation is, of course, of great interest, and what Abbott has to say about it is of much interest. However, in order to cover it one has to be clear and precise, and it's probably wise to write in a way that's somewhat robust against further developments (a tactic mentioned for breaking stories in WN:Newsworthiness). The headline is misleading in a sensationalist way; from the sources, he hinted, he said he might consider, he did not rule out, which falls far short of 'offering military assistance in Iraq'. The first sentence of the lede doesn't describe something than happened at all; it only says that something didn't happen. The second sentence of the lede talks about a "pledge", but no pledge has been described. There is also no answer to basic question when in the lede; and while a reviewer may somethings fix an otherwise okay lede by smoothly inserting a "day" word, ("yesterday", "on Friday", etc.), in this case the lede already has this focus problem I found too fundamental to "just fix". In fact, Obama has now ruled out at least one option. That doesn't necessarily preclude reporting on what Abbott said before Obama said that, but the way one reports it should be modulated. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Review of revision 2690686 [Passed]

Revision 2690686 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 16:28, 15 June 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 2690686 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 16:28, 15 June 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.