Talk:Anonymous people reveal animal cruelty at Australian Inghams poultry producer factory using CCTV footage
Add topicReview of revision 1850112 [Not ready]
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Revision 1850112 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 05:02, 21 March 2013 (UTC).
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Revision 1850112 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 05:02, 21 March 2013 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer:
Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
- Adding Wikinews links and Wikipedia links to aid in article clarity would be nice.
- Done.
- An information box would also be nice.
- Not sure?
- External links need to be removed from the article.
- Done.
- SMH should be spelled out for an international audience and then put into italics.
- Done (not in italics, but still).
- The lead should identify which abattoir in Sydney's south-west is involved.
- Not done (I didn't find out...).
- There should be greater use of active voice.
- Done.
- Beyond non-neutral words like shocking and distressing, this reads a bit like an Animal Liberation press release to push their agenda. Something needs to be done to address this.
- Done.
- A picture, while not required, would be nice.
- Done.
- An infobox, while not required, would be nice.
- Added {{Australia}}.
--Gryllida 05:16, 21 March 2013 (UTC)
Now found the place too.. --Gryllida 05:19, 21 March 2013 (UTC)
Review of revision 1850181 [Passed]
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Revision 1850181 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 06:17, 21 March 2013 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: NPOV issues gives me some pause but not sure how that can be done easily with a topic like this. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Revision 1850181 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 06:17, 21 March 2013 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: NPOV issues gives me some pause but not sure how that can be done easily with a topic like this. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |