Talk:Australian adaptive rowers prepare as Paralympics looms

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Review of revision 1508592 [Not ready][edit]

There are also style problems here. Right off hand, I observe that the first paragraph starts with some purple prose ("On the icy waters of..."); and the first paragraph is, well, chatty. The first paragraph of a news article, called the lede, should succinctly answer as many as possible of the basic questions about the focal news event of the article. That also means the lede makes the case for newsworthiness. Here newsworthiness will have to rely entirely on the OR aspect of the article, yet the first paragraph doesn't even mention that there is any OR involved; instead, it appears to describe an ongoing process (more like continental drift than like an earthquake). So verifiability isn't the only thing I could have not-ready'd the article for. --Pi zero (talk) 02:48, 24 May 2012 (UTC)
I've modified the lede a bit, and the notes are here. Therefore I'm resubmitting. JJ Harrison (talk) 00:33, 25 May 2012 (UTC)

Notes per request[edit]

Tim Collins (talk) 05:48, 24 May 2012 (UTC)

  • I have requested file rotations for those that need it. JJ Harrison (talk) 00:32, 25 May 2012 (UTC)

Review of revision 1510148 [Not ready][edit]

    • Thanks, we are still learning about the Wikinews process. I've just wiki-linked "eight", since it would interrupt the flow a bit I think. I'm looking at the rest of the points now. JJ Harrison (talk) 00:39, 26 May 2012 (UTC)
      • I think the concerns listed above have been sorted now. JJ Harrison (talk) 23:07, 29 May 2012 (UTC)

Review of revision 1513458 [Passed][edit]

    • Thanks. The IP was me forgetting to log in. The IP didn't make any edits to the article content anyway. JJ Harrison (talk) 23:08, 29 May 2012 (UTC)