Talk:Avalanche in Vail, Colorado kills one

Review of revision 2296995 [Not ready]

Revision 2296995 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 18:23, 8 January 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Not ready: See below. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Comments by reviewer: The fatality was identified. Though as reviewer I could have pulled the statement that he wasn't identified (and there's a lesson there about the hazard in saying that in a synthesis article that's likely to wait at least a few hours to be reviewed), I couldn't add the information, nor make the call as to whether and which information to add. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 2296995 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 18:23, 8 January 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Not ready: See below. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Comments by reviewer: The fatality was identified. Though as reviewer I could have pulled the statement that he wasn't identified (and there's a lesson there about the hazard in saying that in a synthesis article that's likely to wait at least a few hours to be reviewed), I couldn't add the information, nor make the call as to whether and which information to add. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Review of revision 2299543 [Not ready]

Revision 2299543 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 16:43, 9 January 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not ready: NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Comments by reviewer: I am having real problems with verifying the last paragraph. The tribune says "The avalanche comes less than a year after five backcountry snowboarders were killed in an avalanche in April 2013 at Colorado's Loveland Pass, 48 miles west of Denver." This not is this winter, or this year which the original text implied. The Montana part is weird, and the way it is worded suggests that there were five fatalities of which is the only one. It is also a bit close to the source, which says "The Colorado Avalanche Information Center noted there have been at least five such fatalities nationwide, including a snowmobiler killed on New Year's Day in Big Sky, Montana." Wikinews articles are required to be at least three paragraphs long and I would pretty much have to remove the whole last paragraph to get it publishable. (Which I would be okay with because the rest of it generally appears to meet requirements, though I have not thoroughly checked it for close paraphrasing.) Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 2299543 of this article has been reviewed by LauraHale (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 16:43, 9 January 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not ready: NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Comments by reviewer: I am having real problems with verifying the last paragraph. The tribune says "The avalanche comes less than a year after five backcountry snowboarders were killed in an avalanche in April 2013 at Colorado's Loveland Pass, 48 miles west of Denver." This not is this winter, or this year which the original text implied. The Montana part is weird, and the way it is worded suggests that there were five fatalities of which is the only one. It is also a bit close to the source, which says "The Colorado Avalanche Information Center noted there have been at least five such fatalities nationwide, including a snowmobiler killed on New Year's Day in Big Sky, Montana." Wikinews articles are required to be at least three paragraphs long and I would pretty much have to remove the whole last paragraph to get it publishable. (Which I would be okay with because the rest of it generally appears to meet requirements, though I have not thoroughly checked it for close paraphrasing.) Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Review of revision 2302497 [Passed]

Revision 2302497 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 20:26, 10 January 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Several passages were too close to the sources; you need to work on that. Never copy source passages and modify them, as this does not avoid plagiarism; you should be saying things in an entirely original way, only using the information from the sources. Use your own ordering of thoughts, and paragraph sentence and phrase structure; and avoid imitating peculiar turns of phrase and word choices from the sources. When you've done all that, there should be little similarity to source passages, but as a final check, you shouldn't have more than three consecutive words from a source, with obvious exceptions like titles. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 2302497 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 20:26, 10 January 2014 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Several passages were too close to the sources; you need to work on that. Never copy source passages and modify them, as this does not avoid plagiarism; you should be saying things in an entirely original way, only using the information from the sources. Use your own ordering of thoughts, and paragraph sentence and phrase structure; and avoid imitating peculiar turns of phrase and word choices from the sources. When you've done all that, there should be little similarity to source passages, but as a final check, you shouldn't have more than three consecutive words from a source, with obvious exceptions like titles. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.