Talk:Black and Blue Belles win in Canberra Roller Derby League blowout

Review of revision 1892665 [Not ready]

Revision 1892665 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 02:12, 5 May 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not ready: See below. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not ready: See below. Comments by reviewer: Marked as OR, but no OR notes. One of the two synthesis sources has no url, so cannot be checked by a reviewer. The headline doesn't specify the sport or what part of the planet is involved; and it should use sentence case instead of title case (that is, only the first word and proper nouns get capitalized, rather than capitalizing all the important words). Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 1892665 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 02:12, 5 May 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not ready: See below. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not ready: See below. Comments by reviewer: Marked as OR, but no OR notes. One of the two synthesis sources has no url, so cannot be checked by a reviewer. The headline doesn't specify the sport or what part of the planet is involved; and it should use sentence case instead of title case (that is, only the first word and proper nouns get capitalized, rather than capitalizing all the important words). Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Sorry. Pushed the submit button by mistake.

• Supporting Materials Hawkeye7 (talk) 02:39, 5 May 2013 (UTC)

• Intended to review this, but I think I've done a bit too much on the editing end now to do that ethically. --Bddpaux (talk) 18:45, 6 May 2013 (UTC)

THe following citations occurred in the Sources section of the article, but since they're not online sources, they appear to be part of the reporter's notes so I'm moving them here. --Pi zero (talk) 19:27, 6 May 2013 (UTC)

• Gaskin, Lee, "High roller voted the best", Canberra Times, March 1, 2013
• Game Program, CRDL 2013 Bout 2, "Black and Blue Belles vs The Surly Griffins May the 4th Be With You"

Review of revision 1894011 [Not ready]

Revision 1894011 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 20:42, 6 May 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not ready: See below. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Comments by reviewer: I'm not seeing (am I just blind? 'tis possible) documentation of the events of this game. All the supporting materials seem to predate the game, leaving the core OR documentation AWOL. They are bundled with the other supporting documents in the PDF file. I didn't have my notebook, so I scribbled them on a newspaper. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:31, 7 May 2013 (UTC) Aha. --Pi zero (talk) 04:01, 7 May 2013 (UTC) I don't know what a Jubba cloak, or Jabba cloak, is. I've poked around Wikipedia and even hunted about on the internet generally, but neither those investigations nor my personal knowledge of Star Wars tells me what you meant to say here. It is a cloak with a hood, as worn by Jedi knights. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:31, 7 May 2013 (UTC) I found Jubba Cloak on the net easy enough. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:40, 7 May 2013 (UTC) I'd found that on the net too, but it's not Star Wars-related. --Pi zero (talk) 04:00, 7 May 2013 (UTC) The supporting material provided publicly visible in a dropbox seems an inadvisible way to make materials available. Presumably they weren't put on Commons because they're under copyright, but if they're under copyright it's best to email them to scoop at wikinewsie dot org, which exists for just this sort of purpose (along with some other related purposes). I tried uploading to Wikinewsie, but then was unable to access it. I've emailed it to scoop. God only knows what will happen to it. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:31, 7 May 2013 (UTC) You can't upload to Commons (and I really, really don't like uploading to Commons anyway) because it is under copyright, but there is no real life problem, as it is Fair Dealing. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:33, 7 May 2013 (UTC) There was a problem with the lede in that it didn't name the sport, nor actually answer basic question "where" (best be clear, since actually the dateline is where the report is filed from and is not required to be where the focal event took place). I decided this fell within the penumbra of the principle, recommended to me once-upon-a-time by a senior reviewer, that if there's only one way to fix a problem, the reviewer is no more "involved" by fixing it themself than by requiring the reporter to do it. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 1894011 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 20:42, 6 May 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Verifiability: Not ready: See below. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Comments by reviewer: I'm not seeing (am I just blind? 'tis possible) documentation of the events of this game. All the supporting materials seem to predate the game, leaving the core OR documentation AWOL. They are bundled with the other supporting documents in the PDF file. I didn't have my notebook, so I scribbled them on a newspaper. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:31, 7 May 2013 (UTC) Aha. --Pi zero (talk) 04:01, 7 May 2013 (UTC) I don't know what a Jubba cloak, or Jabba cloak, is. I've poked around Wikipedia and even hunted about on the internet generally, but neither those investigations nor my personal knowledge of Star Wars tells me what you meant to say here. It is a cloak with a hood, as worn by Jedi knights. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:31, 7 May 2013 (UTC) I found Jubba Cloak on the net easy enough. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:40, 7 May 2013 (UTC) I'd found that on the net too, but it's not Star Wars-related. --Pi zero (talk) 04:00, 7 May 2013 (UTC) The supporting material provided publicly visible in a dropbox seems an inadvisible way to make materials available. Presumably they weren't put on Commons because they're under copyright, but if they're under copyright it's best to email them to scoop at wikinewsie dot org, which exists for just this sort of purpose (along with some other related purposes). I tried uploading to Wikinewsie, but then was unable to access it. I've emailed it to scoop. God only knows what will happen to it. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:31, 7 May 2013 (UTC) You can't upload to Commons (and I really, really don't like uploading to Commons anyway) because it is under copyright, but there is no real life problem, as it is Fair Dealing. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:33, 7 May 2013 (UTC) There was a problem with the lede in that it didn't name the sport, nor actually answer basic question "where" (best be clear, since actually the dateline is where the report is filed from and is not required to be where the focal event took place). I decided this fell within the penumbra of the principle, recommended to me once-upon-a-time by a senior reviewer, that if there's only one way to fix a problem, the reviewer is no more "involved" by fixing it themself than by requiring the reporter to do it. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

• • Correct. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:31, 7 May 2013 (UTC)

Review of revision 1894242 [Passed]

Revision 1894242 of this article has been reviewed by RockerballAustralia (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 10:20, 7 May 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Everything raised previously seems to have been fixed. Happy to find a report who takes criticism constructively. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 1894242 of this article has been reviewed by RockerballAustralia (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 10:20, 7 May 2013 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Everything raised previously seems to have been fixed. Happy to find a report who takes criticism constructively. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.