Talk:Blanc extends contract with Paris Saint-Germain by two years

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Review of revision 4195874 [Not ready][edit]

Revision 4195874 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 20:42, 11 February 2016 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • I missed a number of details; given the length of the article; it felt like rather a lot for the reviewer to cut, and includes one key datum in the first sentence.
  • Did the event take place on Wednesday? I couldn't figure out from the sources when the announcement was made.
  • Did Ancelotti help Real Madrid complete their tenth title?
  • The whole sentence about Mourinho is problematic. What concrete fact is being communicated here? One can't say it's that Mourinho won't become the PSG manager for next season because that's predicting the future and also begs the question of why one is remarking about Mourinho rather than someone else. Also, I didn't see Mourinho's history mentioned at all in the sources so all that needs sourcing (and one has to be careful about analysis, too).
  • "one domestic treble previous season"? Perhaps you mean "last season", but if that info is in the sources I missed it.
  • I didn't find any of the last sentence, about Ancelotti and Guardiola.

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Revision 4195874 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 20:42, 11 February 2016 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • I missed a number of details; given the length of the article; it felt like rather a lot for the reviewer to cut, and includes one key datum in the first sentence.
  • Did the event take place on Wednesday? I couldn't figure out from the sources when the announcement was made.
  • Did Ancelotti help Real Madrid complete their tenth title?
  • The whole sentence about Mourinho is problematic. What concrete fact is being communicated here? One can't say it's that Mourinho won't become the PSG manager for next season because that's predicting the future and also begs the question of why one is remarking about Mourinho rather than someone else. Also, I didn't see Mourinho's history mentioned at all in the sources so all that needs sourcing (and one has to be careful about analysis, too).
  • "one domestic treble previous season"? Perhaps you mean "last season", but if that info is in the sources I missed it.
  • I didn't find any of the last sentence, about Ancelotti and Guardiola.

Questions about the above? Ask.

If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Review of revision 4195904 [Passed][edit]

Revision 4195904 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 22:58, 11 February 2016 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • Everything tied up neatly except the Ancelotti/Guardiola sentence.

The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 4195904 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 22:58, 11 February 2016 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • Everything tied up neatly except the Ancelotti/Guardiola sentence.
The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.
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