Talk:Fujitsu launches cloud website for dog pedometer service

Review of revision 1714332 [Not ready]

Revision 1714332 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 18:16, 27 November 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not ready: Needs focus; see below. Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Comments by reviewer: What this appears to need, to work as a news story, is a clearly defined focal event. They didn't just invent the thing in the past day or two, so that's not it. The current failure to define a focal news event (specific, relevant, and fresh) is the reason this feels so much like an advert: give it a clear focus, and it'll feel like a news article. Indeed, the AFP source did poorly on this count. I suspect, from poking around on the web, some specific recent thing has happened that is substantial enough to hang an article on. However, of the two current sources, only one clearly identifies something specific and recent, and the way it describes it doesn't make that specific event sound particularly newsworthy (they only mention it near the bottom of the article, and I do think they're using an inverted pyramid). Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 1714332 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 18:16, 27 November 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Newsworthiness: Not ready: Needs focus; see below. Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. NPOV: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Style: Not reviewed. Please address other issues. Comments by reviewer: What this appears to need, to work as a news story, is a clearly defined focal event. They didn't just invent the thing in the past day or two, so that's not it. The current failure to define a focal news event (specific, relevant, and fresh) is the reason this feels so much like an advert: give it a clear focus, and it'll feel like a news article. Indeed, the AFP source did poorly on this count. I suspect, from poking around on the web, some specific recent thing has happened that is substantial enough to hang an article on. However, of the two current sources, only one clearly identifies something specific and recent, and the way it describes it doesn't make that specific event sound particularly newsworthy (they only mention it near the bottom of the article, and I do think they're using an inverted pyramid). Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Review of revision 1714891 [Passed]

Revision 1714891 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 23:52, 27 November 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 1714891 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 23:52, 27 November 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.