Talk:Google Android smartphone sales triple in the UK this year

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Review of revision 1066218 [Failed][edit]

Revision 1066218 of this article has been reviewed by HJ Mitchell (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 03:19, 27 July 2010 (UTC).[reply]

  • Copyright: Passed
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  • NPOV: Passed
  • Style: Not ready: Could do with a quick copy edit, but nothing major. You could also do with finding better ways of slipping in quotes than "such and such said to The Guardian" (which should be in italics)

Comments by reviewer: You would do well to give a little background on what this thing is so people don't have to go to WP for basic background. My biggest issue, though, is the opening sentence. First, "tripled" or "trebled" would be better grammar, second, what data are you comparing it to? Triplicated form what? Last year? Last month? Last quarter? HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 03:19, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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Revision 1066218 of this article has been reviewed by HJ Mitchell (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 03:19, 27 July 2010 (UTC).[reply]
  • Copyright: Passed
  • Newsworthiness: Not reviewed. Please address other issues.
  • Verifiability: Not reviewed. Please address other issues.
  • NPOV: Passed
  • Style: Not ready: Could do with a quick copy edit, but nothing major. You could also do with finding better ways of slipping in quotes than "such and such said to The Guardian" (which should be in italics)

Comments by reviewer: You would do well to give a little background on what this thing is so people don't have to go to WP for basic background. My biggest issue, though, is the opening sentence. First, "tripled" or "trebled" would be better grammar, second, what data are you comparing it to? Triplicated form what? Last year? Last month? Last quarter? HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 03:19, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

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This "news" article reads too much like an advertisement. Describing handsets as outstanding is not NPOV, nor is listing other available handsets appropriate. Title needs fixing to reflect it's not talking worldwide sales, just the UK, and instead of "this year", use "in 2010" so it's not ambiguous as to if you mean only 2010, or the last 12 months. That's as well as the issues already mentioned above by others. -- Matthewedwards (on the phone, not logged in) -- 69.78.70.150 (talk) 04:27, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

"Triplicated"[edit]

What an abuse of English. "In triplicate" would be where you have three copies of a certain piece of paperwork. It has nothing to do with something being trebled. --Brian McNeil / talk 04:55, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Well according to Wiktionary, "triplicate" can also just mean to triple. It seems a pretty silly use of it to me though, when "tripled" or "trebled" works just fine. Personally I think we should find more excuses to use "sesquiplicate" - multiplied by one and a half. the wub "?!" 17:50, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Review of revision 1066630 [Passed][edit]

Revision 1066630 of this article has been reviewed by HJ Mitchell (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 16:31, 27 July 2010 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: Much better! HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 16:31, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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Revision 1066630 of this article has been reviewed by HJ Mitchell (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 16:31, 27 July 2010 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: Much better! HJ Mitchell | Penny for your thoughts? 16:31, 27 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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