Avoid copying the wordsorphrasesorsentence structure of the sources.
On words alone, a good rule of thumb is there shouldn't be more than three consecutive words from a source, with common-sense exceptions like titles. Several passages were well over that.
Reordering the elements of a sentence helps. It's also good (and I saw some here) to mix elements in a synthesis passage from different sources, or distant parts of a single source.
Another useful technique, for distance from sources, is to leave out a few of the less important details of a source passage when using it (or move the elements of the source passage far away from each other in the synthesis).
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Avoid copying the wordsorphrasesorsentence structure of the sources.
On words alone, a good rule of thumb is there shouldn't be more than three consecutive words from a source, with common-sense exceptions like titles. Several passages were well over that.
Reordering the elements of a sentence helps. It's also good (and I saw some here) to mix elements in a synthesis passage from different sources, or distant parts of a single source.
Another useful technique, for distance from sources, is to leave out a few of the less important details of a source passage when using it (or move the elements of the source passage far away from each other in the synthesis).
The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.
The headline needed changing because it was non-neutral and also not nearly specific enough. (I'd meant to earlier, and kicked myself for forgetting till after publication — renamings after publication are discouraged.) --Pi zero (talk) 17:35, 28 September 2011 (UTC)Reply
