Talk:Lockerbie convict Abdelbaset Ali al-Megrahi buried after dying at Libyan home

Guilt and innocence

Admittedly, I'm not very good at sticking to my own rule of thumb. However, in cases where serious allegations (regardless of wether I agree with them or not) of innocence are made, I like to use the term convict. That's perfectly factual and neutral; al-Megrahi was convicted at trial, indisputably. Accordingly, I'd be inclined to move to Lockerbie bombing convict Abdelbaset Ali al-Megrahi dies at home. Or, since the attrocity is so well-known, maybe even simply Lockerbie convict Abdelbaset Ali al-Megrahi dies at home. A relatively minor point that we've missed in the past, and I'd just go ahead and do it myself, but I don't want to disrupt article creation. Blood Red Sandman ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 13:49, 20 May 2012 (UTC)

OR

Incidentally, I have notes from an unpublished interview with Richard Marquise of the FBI, who was the chief Amerikan in the investigation. They're intended for use as-and-when I get on with a massive Lockerbie investigative report, but I could dig them out. I likely cannot offer them in time for this article (in about an hour a van arrives for me to move out of my present home in), but in a few days there's likely to be a follow-up and I could likely offer some material for that. I'll be gone overnight at the very least, so please don't hold back waiting for me as it will just degenerate the timeliness of this article. Blood Red Sandman ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 13:49, 20 May 2012 (UTC)

Review of revision 1508072 [Passed]

Revision 1508072 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 15:49, 23 May 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Don't rely so heavily on "synonyms" for distance from source; superficial changes like this don't make for original text. Structural change should be involved, at least to phrases and sentences (and preferably, of course, to the organization of the article as a whole). A very small illustration. (Forgive me taking the opportunity to practice for the essay I'd like to write about this; the example is flawed anyway since it's just rephrasing a single sentence.) BBC: "Scottish First Minister Alex Salmond also said Megrahi's death was an occasion to remember the victims of Lockerbie." Here (initial): "Salmond also believed this was a time to remember those killed in the incident." The major elements have retained their ordering and grammatical roles; there's been no structural change. "Megrahi's death" has become "this", "occasion" has become "time", "victims" have become "those killed", and "Lockerbie" has become "the incident". Here (rephrased): "Salmond also called for remembrance of those killed." The whole distinctive time/occasion to remember construct has been replaced (and even the central verb of the sentence has changed qualitatively), resulting in a structurally distinct sentence. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 1508072 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 15:49, 23 May 2012 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Don't rely so heavily on "synonyms" for distance from source; superficial changes like this don't make for original text. Structural change should be involved, at least to phrases and sentences (and preferably, of course, to the organization of the article as a whole). A very small illustration. (Forgive me taking the opportunity to practice for the essay I'd like to write about this; the example is flawed anyway since it's just rephrasing a single sentence.) BBC: "Scottish First Minister Alex Salmond also said Megrahi's death was an occasion to remember the victims of Lockerbie." Here (initial): "Salmond also believed this was a time to remember those killed in the incident." The major elements have retained their ordering and grammatical roles; there's been no structural change. "Megrahi's death" has become "this", "occasion" has become "time", "victims" have become "those killed", and "Lockerbie" has become "the incident". Here (rephrased): "Salmond also called for remembrance of those killed." The whole distinctive time/occasion to remember construct has been replaced (and even the central verb of the sentence has changed qualitatively), resulting in a structurally distinct sentence. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.