Talk:Palestinian released from Israeli prison following eight-month hunger strike

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Just some miscellaneous thoughts, for whoever might review this:

  • The last paragraph has a couple of points I noticed (on first reading) bear thinking about as candidates for tweaking:
  • The adjective "harsh"; the question is whether it comes across as attributed or as asserted opinion.
  • The assertion that the Israelis acted out of fear his death would cause violence; pretty clearly needs attribution.
  • Will clearly call for some thoughtful contemplation re neutrality; do the sources enable a balanced perspective, and does the article provide such?

--Pi zero (talk) 17:56, 25 December 2013 (UTC)

Review of revision 2265944 [Passed][edit]