Talk:Riots in Hamburg, Germany injure dozens

Review of revision 881733 [Failed]

Revision 881733 of this article has been reviewed by Peteforsyth (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 23:56, 13 September 2009 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Not ready: I believe this is all about more or less a single event spanning from Friday to Saturday of this week. The Al Jazeera story has some confusing language about that so I'm not sure. But the phrase "last Friday" makes it sound like there are 2 separate events (especially since it comes right after the "violence is common" bit). Can this be clarified? NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Readability: I'd move the name of the neighborhood up from the 3rd paragraph to the 2nd. "Tens of…" is not a common phrase (at least in American English). I'd suggest just being specific: 47 people injured, 60 or more arrested. I'd also suggest giving numbers of all parties involved, since the 2000 officer number is cited: 2000 leftists, and about 100 NPD members. (Giving one of those without the others leaves questions in the reader's mind...) Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 881733 of this article has been reviewed by Peteforsyth (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 23:56, 13 September 2009 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Not ready: I believe this is all about more or less a single event spanning from Friday to Saturday of this week. The Al Jazeera story has some confusing language about that so I'm not sure. But the phrase "last Friday" makes it sound like there are 2 separate events (especially since it comes right after the "violence is common" bit). Can this be clarified? NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: Readability: I'd move the name of the neighborhood up from the 3rd paragraph to the 2nd. "Tens of…" is not a common phrase (at least in American English). I'd suggest just being specific: 47 people injured, 60 or more arrested. I'd also suggest giving numbers of all parties involved, since the 2000 officer number is cited: 2000 leftists, and about 100 NPD members. (Giving one of those without the others leaves questions in the reader's mind...) Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Thanks for your in-depth review. I've tried to address the concerns listed, could you have another look at it? Thanks. Tempodivalse [talk] 00:08, 14 September 2009 (UTC)

No problem -- interesting article. I just made a couple edits (suggestions, really) -- do those seem like improvements to you? I'll go ahead and publish if you approve of them, but would prefer to know if they sit well with you first! -Peteforsyth (talk) 01:27, 14 September 2009 (UTC)

Yep, your edits are fine with me. The story's now a bit on the short side - only three paragraphs - but I think it's large enough for publishing. Thanks again for your suggestion and edit! Tempodivalse [talk] 02:01, 14 September 2009 (UTC)

Wikipedia links, possibly relevant

• w:National Democratic Party of Germany
• w:Boroughs and quarters of Hamburg
• w:Altona, Hamburg
• w:Neo-Nazism#Germany

-Peteforsyth (talk) 00:05, 14 September 2009 (UTC)

Review of revision 881906 [Passed]

Revision 881906 of this article has been reviewed by Peteforsyth (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 02:07, 14 September 2009 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: per discussion with author above The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 881906 of this article has been reviewed by Peteforsyth (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 02:07, 14 September 2009 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: per discussion with author above The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.