Talk:Saudi Arabia: Princes arrested after protesting austerity

From Wikinews, the free news source you can write!
Jump to navigation Jump to search

Review of revision 4374467 [Passed][edit]

Revision 4374467 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 03:48, 8 January 2018 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • Best to get the most-recent-date that establishes freshness into the first sentence, so the reader doesn't come out of the first sentence wondering why it's fresh. Though it was mentioned in the lede. (Moving that date up also made it possible to insert a paragraph break without losing the establishment of freshness in the lede.)
  • A few somewhat over-length passages identical to source.
  • history of edits during review (of course).

The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 4374467 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 03:48, 8 January 2018 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • Best to get the most-recent-date that establishes freshness into the first sentence, so the reader doesn't come out of the first sentence wondering why it's fresh. Though it was mentioned in the lede. (Moving that date up also made it possible to insert a paragraph break without losing the establishment of freshness in the lede.)
  • A few somewhat over-length passages identical to source.
  • history of edits during review (of course).
The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

"Crown Prince Mohammad bin Salman has been overseeing anti-corruption, austerity and social reforms programs since late last year, which included giving women the right to drive automobiles" -- he supported, but did not "give" the right (prince Alwaleed bin Talal issued a statement in support of eradicating this ban). Decree has to be signed by the king, so it is not entirely true to say the prince gave the right.
223.237.201.153 (talk) 18:51, 8 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

From a practical perspective, the question becomes, what change to the text is proposed? Keeping in mind that substantive changes are possible for the next... eight hours or so, is it? Also keeping in mind that the current text of this article does not say the prince gave the the right, it says he oversaw the reforms. --Pi zero (talk) 19:18, 8 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Retrieved from "https://en.wikinews.org/w/index.php?title=Talk:Saudi_Arabia:_Princes_arrested_after_protesting_austerity&oldid=4374671"