Talk:Senator Ted Kennedy dies at age 77
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paragraph on Mass General is weak[edit]
just diagnosed on 20; released on 21.
weren't there other tests, etc. an earlier wiki article says (i think) that the doctor stated kennedy would remain for several days for further tests.
perhaps for simplicity of the article it should just be one sentence - "kennedy was diagnosed with brain cancer on May 20" and a little something about any treatment between may 20 and death. the sentence on discharge on may 21 says nothing. (sorry, but i'm too tired to do anything at moment...heading off to bed before sun rises.)--98.116.115.180 (talk) 08:39, 27 August 2009 (UTC)