Talk:Slovenians reject referendum to recognize same-sex marriage

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Review of revision 4074836 [Not ready][edit]

Suggestions?[edit]

I rewrote the whole article, but the ones you linked are mostly essays. "Style guide" is a guideline. Any more details that I should add? --George Ho (talk) 04:24, 21 December 2015 (UTC)

@George Ho: Those pages are explanations of what writers should be trying to do, and I'm providing links to them so you can benefit from their advice. I recommend taking them seriously. Don't take an adversarial approach to the reporter/reviewer relationship (I mention that because it occurs to me there are various situations on Wikipedia where comments would be taken adversarially, and would be laced with references to pages meant to justify the comments, rather than links meant to provide further explanation). Another page you may find helpful is WN:Pillars of Wikinews writing.

The first paragraph atm is background and analysis. Analysis isn't allowed under our neutrality policy, background doesn't belong in the first paragraph (see WN:inverted pyramid). The lede should be a short paragraph that succinctly answers lots of the five Ws and H in a few words.

The article atm is below minimal length (and some of what's here is, as mentioned, analysis). --Pi zero (talk) 05:18, 21 December 2015 (UTC)

I added a couple short paragraphs. Helpful? --George Ho (talk) 08:24, 21 December 2015 (UTC)

@George Ho: It's looking better, yes. The phrase "and the recent referendum is an example" should be dropped, I think. And I'd judge it still a bit too short. But it's definitely improving. (Mind, so far I'm only judging it on superficial appearance; if there's a problem that would only be detected during source-check, I wouldn't know about that yet. Some first-time writers get tripped up on our copyright standards, for example. But everything learned on a first Wikinews article speeds later articles, which important, so you're already ahead of the game. :-)

When you believe it's ready, remember to resubmit it for review; it won't get reviewed if it isn't submitted, and it can only be published by passing review while it's still fresh. --Pi zero (talk) 12:41, 21 December 2015 (UTC)

Review of revision 4076738 [Not ready][edit]

Review of revision 4077323 [Passed][edit]