Talk:Australia women's water polo team into FINA Women's World League Super Finals quarter finals

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Journalist notes[edit]

E-mail sent to scoop about this. The Australian media has not published about this yet. They are still on the game where Australia beat Canada from the previous date. My belief is the e-mail to scoop makes two sources? :) --LauraHale (talk) 01:28, 1 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Headline[edit]

About the headline: "Australia women's water polo team into FINA Women's World League Super Finals quarter finals." "Into" is not a verb, and so I'm wondering if you mean "go to"? Still the verb "go to" is "kinda" weak. You use qualified in the story. How about "move to", "head into", "push toward", or something "sportsy" without a preposition! Crtew (talk) 03:11, 1 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

"into" isn't actually ungrammatical here, just passive voice: the verb "is" is omitted per headlinese. Granted, active voice is preferable when we can swing it. --Pi zero (talk) 03:34, 1 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Definitely not ungrammmatical, but lacks some "ummph" and the headline's too long. How about "Australian women's water polo team advance to FINA quarter finals". Just a suggestion.Crtew (talk) 05:40, 1 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Review of revision 1516290 [Passed][edit]

Revision 1516290 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 05:31, 1 June 2012 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • The hard part of this review was deciding where to draw the line on two independent sources. The writer even turned up some other miscellaneous sanity-check-type confirmations of other miscellaneous facts; but in the end I decided to be satisfied listing multiple sources for just the most very basic stats.

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Revision 1516290 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 05:31, 1 June 2012 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • The hard part of this review was deciding where to draw the line on two independent sources. The writer even turned up some other miscellaneous sanity-check-type confirmations of other miscellaneous facts; but in the end I decided to be satisfied listing multiple sources for just the most very basic stats.
The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.
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