Talk:Borussia Dortmund captain Mats Hummels to join rivals Bayern Munich

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Review of revision 4213987 [Not ready][edit]

Revision 4213987 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 03:28, 11 May 2016 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • The following facts in the article I did not find in the sources. Keep in mind that it's not fair to expect reviewers to know stuff: document everything, thoroughly. That's the concept with Wikinews; any reviewer with general competence at review should be able to review any submitted article without having to have specialized knowledge and without having to search for anything outside the cited sources. It's "obvious" that Paris is in France, but not that Robert Lewandowski is a football player, let alone what team he plays for.
  • Hummels is the current captain of BVB.
  • Dortmund and Bayern are "arch rivals" (this sounds like a kind of subjective statement; might be best to just cut it).
  • How long Hummels was with Bayern before moving to Dortmund.
  • This transfer is one year before his contract with BVB expires.
  • The entire last paragraph.

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Revision 4213987 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 03:28, 11 May 2016 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • The following facts in the article I did not find in the sources. Keep in mind that it's not fair to expect reviewers to know stuff: document everything, thoroughly. That's the concept with Wikinews; any reviewer with general competence at review should be able to review any submitted article without having to have specialized knowledge and without having to search for anything outside the cited sources. It's "obvious" that Paris is in France, but not that Robert Lewandowski is a football player, let alone what team he plays for.
  • Hummels is the current captain of BVB.
  • Dortmund and Bayern are "arch rivals" (this sounds like a kind of subjective statement; might be best to just cut it).
  • How long Hummels was with Bayern before moving to Dortmund.
  • This transfer is one year before his contract with BVB expires.
  • The entire last paragraph.

Questions about the above? Ask.

If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Maybe this source helps to confirm they are arch rivals *Paul Gittings. "Bayern routs arch rival Dortmund to keep perfect record" — CNN, October 4, 2015

The thing is in Bundesliga, most successful club is Bayern Munich, and second comes BVB.
acagastya ⚽️ 🏆 🎾 🚀 🔬 👟 🎬 🎼 📰 12:25, 11 May 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Review of revision 4214130 [Passed][edit]

Revision 4214130 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 14:50, 11 May 2016 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: None added.

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Revision 4214130 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 14:50, 11 May 2016 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: None added.

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