Talk:Harvard Law School gives its highest honour to Pakistani judge
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Revision 728760 of this article has been reviewed by brianmc (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 14:43, 20 November 2008 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: this needs boatloads of work to fix the grammar. It also needs a title that doesn't have spelling errors in it. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
Revision 728760 of this article has been reviewed by brianmc (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 14:43, 20 November 2008 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: this needs boatloads of work to fix the grammar. It also needs a title that doesn't have spelling errors in it. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews. |
--Brian McNeil / talk 14:43, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
can u explain it pleaseAzamishaque (talk) 15:02, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
- Can I explain it? Yes. It was incomprehensible. Please go and spend a lot of time reading well crafted English and perhaps do some courses on English grammar. Oh, and install an inline spell checker. --Brian McNeil / talk 17:02, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
I have completed a fact check, and dropped some things that were harder to confirm and not at the heart of the story. Did not easily find a source for the 111th brigade, so removed it. The Asian newspapers that said that Marshall received an award were not backed by Harvard websites, so I dropped that. Chaudry is probably the third honoree, but it was not totally clear to me, so I dropped that too. Next task is to copy edit it for grammar. --InfantGorilla (talk) 16:52, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
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[edit]There is a student newspaper article at http://media.www.hlrecord.org/media/storage/paper609/news/2008/11/20/News/Pakistans.Chief.Justice.Awarded.Medal.Of.Freedom-3554256.shtml I did not use it as a source, but it is worth a read.
Have you considered including quotes from the ceremony? A sentence from Justice Chaudhry and one from Dean Egan may help the article.
Was there any reaction to the award from Pakistani authorities or Musharraf supporters?
--InfantGorilla (talk) 17:24, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
I hope the fact checking and editing I did was useful. You may also want to introduce the third paragraph with a sentence like For several months in 2007, Chaudry was the focal point of a dispute between the judiciary and President Pervez Musharraf's military government. If you don't want to add any of the material I suggested above, then I recommend you tag the article for another {{review}}. I am going off line now. --InfantGorilla (talk) 17:53, 20 November 2008 (UTC)
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Revision 728994 of this article has been reviewed by SVTCobra (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 00:34, 21 November 2008 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Could have contained some quotes from his speech, but it has all the news elements. --SVTCobra 00:34, 21 November 2008 (UTC) The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Revision 728994 of this article has been reviewed by SVTCobra (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 00:34, 21 November 2008 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: Could have contained some quotes from his speech, but it has all the news elements. --SVTCobra 00:34, 21 November 2008 (UTC) The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
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[edit]Thanks, InfantGorilla, for fixing that embarrassing factual mistake I made. Cheers, --SVTCobra 14:38, 21 November 2008 (UTC)
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[edit]{{editprotected}} Category:Iftikhar Muhammad Chaudhry Rana (talk) 18:11, 12 February 2010 (UTC)
- Done. --Brian McNeil / talk 18:57, 12 February 2010 (UTC)