Talk:Indian cricketer Sehwag announces international retirement

Review of revision 3912955 [Not ready]

Revision 3912955 of this article has been reviewed by Cirt (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 08:21, 21 October 2015 (UTC). Copyright: Not ready: HUGE blockquote in the middle of the article is way too big. It's okay to use a quote, but I'd say one sentence or less. Newsworthiness: Not ready: Needs to be explained in the headline title of the article to give context to reader. Before clicking on this I had no idea what it was about. Sports? Cricket? Location? Please add country and sport to title of article. Also, I saw "surrenders" and thought it was about a criminal surrendering after a manhunt. Verifiability: Not ready: Verifiable, yes, but again, using this space to comment more about Copyvio -- basically the entire article is just one big w:WP:QUOTEFARM -- strung together quotes with hardly any actual reporting besides copy/pasting quotes. NPOV: Not ready: Not enough context given for reader here. Written from almost like an w:WP:INUNIVERSE type of fictional tone, not enough background provided in first paragraph about what this is actually about. Style: Not ready: Poor overall style. HUGE blockquote. Article basically all quotes. Not enough context or background for reader. Reads basically like a w:Press release. Comments by reviewer: Unfortunately, article needs lots of work, per comments, above. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Revision 3912955 of this article has been reviewed by Cirt (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 08:21, 21 October 2015 (UTC). Copyright: Not ready: HUGE blockquote in the middle of the article is way too big. It's okay to use a quote, but I'd say one sentence or less. Newsworthiness: Not ready: Needs to be explained in the headline title of the article to give context to reader. Before clicking on this I had no idea what it was about. Sports? Cricket? Location? Please add country and sport to title of article. Also, I saw "surrenders" and thought it was about a criminal surrendering after a manhunt. Verifiability: Not ready: Verifiable, yes, but again, using this space to comment more about Copyvio -- basically the entire article is just one big w:WP:QUOTEFARM -- strung together quotes with hardly any actual reporting besides copy/pasting quotes. NPOV: Not ready: Not enough context given for reader here. Written from almost like an w:WP:INUNIVERSE type of fictional tone, not enough background provided in first paragraph about what this is actually about. Style: Not ready: Poor overall style. HUGE blockquote. Article basically all quotes. Not enough context or background for reader. Reads basically like a w:Press release. Comments by reviewer: Unfortunately, article needs lots of work, per comments, above. Questions about the above? Ask. If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

I've added some more details, and added back in a few words of quotation in reactions from fellow players. While I agree that there was too much quoted at the time of the first review, some indication of what his colleagues said is appropriate I think. I've also attempted to improve the article with some copyediting etc and hope that someone can review this soon - I now can't as I'm too involved! Bencherlite (talk) 10:57, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Great job, Bencherlite (t · c · b), thank you very much for your help ! I agree with you both that there was too much quoted, before, and that some quotes are helpful and your improvements are helpful and quite beneficial. It looks like a 2nd Review is currently taking place by Pi zero (t · c · b). Good luck, -- Cirt (talk) 12:20, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Move request

@Cirt: Please Move the page to Indian cricketer Sehwag announces retirement
14.139.242.195 (talk) 08:43, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Done, great new title ! -- Cirt (talk) 10:15, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Actually, he's not retiring from all forms of the game so this title is misleading. Pinging Pi zero (t · c · b) in the hope that he sees this before publishing. Bencherlite (talk) 13:31, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Would inserting 'international' save it? Seems that's the "most important and unique thing." Indian cricketer Sehwag announces internetional retirement? BRS ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 13:35, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

I think you mean "Indian cricketer Sehwag announces international retirement" (methinks you type "internet" too often!), which would work. Bencherlite (talk) 13:42, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

My thanks to you both. :) -- Cirt (talk) 15:38, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

Lol. BRS ^{(Talk) (Contribs)} 01:30, 22 October 2015 (UTC)

Review of revision 3914520 [Passed]

Revision 3914520 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 14:25, 21 October 2015 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 3914520 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 14:25, 21 October 2015 (UTC). Copyright: Passed Newsworthiness: Passed Verifiability: Passed NPOV: Passed Style: Passed Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.