Talk:London Pride organisers apologise after protestors interrupt parade

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Notes during review[edit]

Stop right there before publishing. "England" is important for the headline, move it again.
103.254.128.86 (talk) 22:01, 11 July 2018 (UTC)

And so is which type of protestors interrupted the parade.
103.254.128.86 (talk) 22:02, 11 July 2018 (UTC)
And HYS should be above the photo gallery. See the other article for example.
103.254.128.86 (talk) 22:05, 11 July 2018 (UTC)
The question for the previous wording of the headline is not about the nature of the protesters, but about the organizers' characterization of the nature of the protesters. The truth in this case is too surreal to capture easily in a succinct headline, though maybe there's some way to do it; I felt after reading the original headline and then going on to read the article that I had been misled by both the headline and lede. I'm still uncomfortable about the lede, as it includes the essential information about how the organizers described the protesters but omits additional important information about who the protesters were. I noticed at least some of the sources doing better. I'm trying to decide now whether or not the current arrangement is sufficiently acceptable, and, if not, whether it's possible for me to fix it as reviewer. --Pi zero (talk) 22:14, 11 July 2018 (UTC)
Regarding the "England:" prefix, as remarked in the edit summary I feel a reader, even if they don't know where London is, should be able to make a decision about whether they're interested to click through, and not feel misled once they do so. It worries me that we've lately gotten to prefixing a large fraction of our headlines with these sorts of prefixes, which can be used occasionally but are not all that great as headline style (they're not sentences) and seem to suggest anyone not from that country should not be interested, at odds with the sort of global awareness it seems we ought to encourage. --Pi zero (talk) 23:45, 11 July 2018 (UTC)

Review of revision 4419430 [Passed][edit]