Talk:Musician Joni Mitchell hospitalised after found unconscious in home

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Review of revision 3368315 [Not ready][edit]


Hey Pi Zero. Just changed the paragraph you mentioned. I direct quoted Rolling Stone instead. Thank you for letting me know I did that.

Also I tried to find the tweet that you highlighted. Joni Mitchell's website (with the quote talked of in sources) says she was found unconscious - probably just go with that than the tweet. =) MusicrocksUOW (talk) 06:40, 2 April 2015 (UTC)

Sorry I couldn't get back to this sooner. I'll take a look now. Wish I'd included a link to the tweet in my comments above (yet another lesson in what can go wrong when writing review comments; sigh). --Pi zero (talk) 15:32, 3 April 2015 (UTC)

Review of revision 3371599 [Not ready][edit]

Hey Pi Zero, ah fair enough about the direct quote - I will fix the paragraph so that it explains without scuffing or direct quoting. I saw the tweet you sent me the link to. I may just take the tweet out of the article - might be better that way. To make it a fresher article, I have found a recent source talking about the disease Mitchell believes she has had for a few years - it seems to be the main topic at the moment. Thank you. MusicrocksUOW (talk) 22:28, 3 April 2015 (UTC)

@MusicrocksUOW: Fwiw, since we have corroboration that that really is Stojsic's twitter account, there's no reason you can't use the twitter account itself as a source, if the information you're taking from it is that a message on Stojsic's twitter acount said such-and-such. We couldn't take it as fact that she wasn't found unconscious, but we could report, amongst all the other information here about what was said where, that that was said there. (Trust-worthiness depends, you see, on what you're trusting it for.) It does seem relevant for the reader to know that there's that dissenting report floating around out there. --Pi zero (talk) 00:05, 4 April 2015 (UTC)

@Pi zero - ok cool - have just added the tweet into the story, and also added it into the sources. I fixed up the paragraph on the paramedics as well, and I wrote in Mitchell's Morgellons Disease to add freshness into the article. Going to put it up for review again now. =) MusicrocksUOW (talk) 01:03, 4 April 2015 (UTC)

Review of revision 3372486 [Not ready][edit]

Hey, so should I take the last paragraph out then and leave it how it is? MusicrocksUOW (talk) 02:12, 4 April 2015 (UTC)

No need to remove it, I think. (I've not specifically source-checked it yet, but I'm guessing there won't be a problem.) It's relevant background information, and it's given a reasonable place in the inverted pyramid. What the article needs is something new to happen, and that cause wouldn't be advanced by removing the last paragraph. --Pi zero (talk) 02:45, 4 April 2015 (UTC)

Review of revision 3373861 [Passed][edit]