Talk:Principal, teacher arrested for allegedly whipping two students late for school in Ayetoro, Nigeria

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Review of revision 4407348 [Not ready][edit]

Revision 4407348 of this article has been reviewed by SVTCobra (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 18:22, 19 May 2018 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • After reading all the sources, I have a real problem with how the article synthesises the events. The article describes Livinus just as a witness as if he was just standing there. The sources describe him accidentally observing this event happening as he was on his way to work. Even though he's a policeman, he was not on duty.
  • Livinus called Itele and more police were sent say sources. But the latter is omitted and jumps into a quote from public relations?

I did not feel I could fix these issues and remain independent

  • Style: I do not like how one quote is followed by another just separated by a space. The man said, "Hello." "My name is John Doe" added the man ... sorry I didn't know how to describe it, so I am using this little example.

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Revision 4407348 of this article has been reviewed by SVTCobra (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 18:22, 19 May 2018 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • After reading all the sources, I have a real problem with how the article synthesises the events. The article describes Livinus just as a witness as if he was just standing there. The sources describe him accidentally observing this event happening as he was on his way to work. Even though he's a policeman, he was not on duty.
  • Livinus called Itele and more police were sent say sources. But the latter is omitted and jumps into a quote from public relations?

I did not feel I could fix these issues and remain independent

  • Style: I do not like how one quote is followed by another just separated by a space. The man said, "Hello." "My name is John Doe" added the man ... sorry I didn't know how to describe it, so I am using this little example.

Questions about the above? Ask.

If possible, please address the above issues then resubmit the article for another review (by replacing {{tasks}} in the article with {{review}}). This talk page will be updated with subsequent reviews.

Review of revision 4407404 [Passed][edit]

Revision 4407404 of this article has been reviewed by SVTCobra (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 21:38, 19 May 2018 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: Although the sources all rely heavily on one person's perspective, I feel we could have used more of it, with proper attribution.

The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Revision 4407404 of this article has been reviewed by SVTCobra (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 21:38, 19 May 2018 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: Although the sources all rely heavily on one person's perspective, I feel we could have used more of it, with proper attribution.

The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.
@SVTCobra: Decrease the protection level -- I can not edit it even when logged it.
•–• 21:46, 19 May 2018 (UTC)[reply]
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