Talk:Russia leases submarine K-152 Nerpa to India for ten years
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Latest comment: 12 years ago by Pi zero in topic Review of revision 1380651 [Passed]
- Comment This is a mishmash of active/passive voice, and tenses. It also, 'technically', fails NPOV for use of the word prowess; that is not only inappropriate for a description from Wikinews, it is incorrectly used here.
- And, in the second paragraph, "[...] took control of the submarine from Bolshoi Kamen, a port town [...]". was the submarine controlled by the town? Because, that's what you've written.
- I would normally not highlight these errors, and simply correct them; but, I am coming to the conclusion that these errors will persist until pointed out. This article could be failed on-the-spot based on these points, but it would be far, far better were the original author to take on-board these issues, fix them, and avoid the same in the future. --Brian McNeil / talk 20:23, 23 January 2012 (UTC)
- I have tried to address the concerns you have raised, although Srinivas should take a note of them for future reference. --Rayboy8 (my talk) (my contributions) 21:28, 23 January 2012 (UTC)
- The active/passive voice issue does not appear to have been addressed, and the tense problem actually appears to be worse ("will have enhanced"). --Pi zero (talk) 21:43, 23 January 2012 (UTC)
Review of revision 1380651 [Passed]
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Revision 1380651 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 05:43, 24 January 2012 (UTC).
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Revision 1380651 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 05:43, 24 January 2012 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer:
The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |