Talk:US National Park Service announces part of Yosemite National Park to close for days as flooding forecast

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Review of revision 4723469 [Not ready][edit]

Revision 4723469 of this article has been reviewed by SVTCobra (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 05:28, 26 April 2023 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: Unfortunately, this fails review in its current state. Keep international readers in mind; where is Yosemite? (WN:5Ws). And who says it will be closed? Also, WN:FUTURE dictates we can't say things to be definite if they are only planned. Furthermore, just looking at the headlines of the sources, it's either "parts" or "most" of the park which will be closed. Attribution of claims is important. Lastly, please review WN:TENSE before resubmitting. Cheers,

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Revision 4723469 of this article has been reviewed by SVTCobra (talk · contribs) and found not ready at 05:28, 26 April 2023 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: Unfortunately, this fails review in its current state. Keep international readers in mind; where is Yosemite? (WN:5Ws). And who says it will be closed? Also, WN:FUTURE dictates we can't say things to be definite if they are only planned. Furthermore, just looking at the headlines of the sources, it's either "parts" or "most" of the park which will be closed. Attribution of claims is important. Lastly, please review WN:TENSE before resubmitting. Cheers,

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Thanks for the feedback[edit]

Thanks @SVTCobra for taking the time to review this article and to give me feedback. I think I've made the proper corrections and have resubmitted. Dr vulpes (talk) 09:59, 26 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I have done some copy-editing and added images. Cheers, SVTCobra 13:35, 26 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]
The NPS map shows it's really a quite small area of the overall park. SVTCobra 13:38, 26 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]
It might be small when compared to the rest of the park but that is where a majority of people go when they visit the park. Also it's where the camp ground and hotels are located. Dr vulpes (talk) 04:12, 27 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Review of revision 4724013 [Passed][edit]

Revision 4724013 of this article has been reviewed by Heavy Water (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 16:56, 28 April 2023 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: @Dr vulpes: Good first article. Remember to use relative dating (e.g., yesterday) or days of the week when possible.

  • I cut KTVU as it appeared redundant and thus forbidden by WN:CS.
  • NPS said the closure is of the eastern/"most of" Yosemite Valley. CNN confused Yosemite Valley with the broader Yosemite Park. The affected area is, as SVTCobra said above, a small portion of the Park.
  • Instagram dated the NPS' post to Wednesday, but it was already picked up by CNN on Tuesday.
  • See edit history for more.

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Revision 4724013 of this article has been reviewed by Heavy Water (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 16:56, 28 April 2023 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer: @Dr vulpes: Good first article. Remember to use relative dating (e.g., yesterday) or days of the week when possible.

  • I cut KTVU as it appeared redundant and thus forbidden by WN:CS.
  • NPS said the closure is of the eastern/"most of" Yosemite Valley. CNN confused Yosemite Valley with the broader Yosemite Park. The affected area is, as SVTCobra said above, a small portion of the Park.
  • Instagram dated the NPS' post to Wednesday, but it was already picked up by CNN on Tuesday.
  • See edit history for more.
The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.
Somehow I lost the conversion template when correcting the temperatures. Heavy Water (talk) 17:23, 28 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@Heavy Water:. The conversion template doesn't work for differentials, only absolute temperatures. I tried to use is but if it is 10 degrees the output is 10 °F (−12.2 °C), yielding negative numbers. Anyway, why did you drop the part about the Merced River and the level which forces closures? Cheers,--SVTCobra 18:02, 28 April 2023 (UTC)[reply]
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