Talk:US military brig officials order whistle-blowing suspect to sleep naked
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Latest comment: 13 years ago by Pi zero in topic Review of revision 1190829 [Passed]
Title needs improvement
[edit]The title needs to be clearer. Wikileaks has been in the news lately for the Assange extradition proceedings, so neither "Wikileaks suspect" nor "Bradley Manning" is going to tell a general international audience who this article is about. --Pi zero (talk) 21:06, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
- What do you suggest? Mattisse (talk) 21:30, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
- For starters, do not use a noun which is also a verb as the sentence subject. How about US military prison officials order Pfc Bradley Manning to sleep naked? - Amgine | t 21:41, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
- Drop the 'Pfc'. I haven't a clue what that means. — μ 21:50, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
- Pfc = Private first class. Mattisse (talk) 22:12, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
- He is not technically in a prison but in a military brig. Could that wording be used? "US military brig officials order Bradley Manning to sleep naked"? US military has one maximum security prison, at Fort Leavenworth, and that is only for those already convicted. Mattisse (talk) 22:08, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
- Drop the 'Pfc'. I haven't a clue what that means. — μ 21:50, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
- For starters, do not use a noun which is also a verb as the sentence subject. How about US military prison officials order Pfc Bradley Manning to sleep naked? - Amgine | t 21:41, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
- How about dropping the name, if it's felt he's not well-enough known - "US military brig officials order whistleblowing suspect to sleep naked"? Blood Red Sandman (Talk) (Contribs) 22:15, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
- (edit conflict) "Marine Corps brig officials order Pfc. Bradley Manning to sleep naked," might work as well. The Quantico base is operated by the Marines. Or possibly "US military whistle-blower ordered to sleep naked." —Mikemoral♪♫ 22:17, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
- Hey, I like that last one the best! Or "US military brig officials order whistleblowing suspect to sleep naked" Mattisse (talk) 22:20, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
- (edit conflict) "Marine Corps brig officials order Pfc. Bradley Manning to sleep naked," might work as well. The Quantico base is operated by the Marines. Or possibly "US military whistle-blower ordered to sleep naked." —Mikemoral♪♫ 22:17, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
Review of revision 1190829 [Passed]
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Revision 1190829 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 22:18, 7 March 2011 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |
Revision 1190829 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 22:18, 7 March 2011 (UTC).
Comments by reviewer: None added. The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer. |