Wikinews talk:Briefs/February 12, 2014

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Script pre-review[edit]

  • There were two points made in the lede of the Scottish same-sex marriage article. The more important was that same-sex marriage was legalized. The second was that religious bodies could opt in. The second point was made in the draft summary; I switched it to the main point but the second point is not being made in the current draft. I was reluctant to revise extensively enough to do both, as reviewer, especially given issues of what to include in briefs.
  • I believe the current draft is acceptable.

--Pi zero (talk) 14:38, 12 February 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

  • Fixed Scottish same-sex marriage story.
  • Is the decision about the comparison with the Olympic sized pool final? For the casual reader or listener, but especially for the listener, the numbers are going to be a snoozer. But the image of a pool clearly and intuitively conveys the point that this is not a lot of pollution but it is toxic enough for an alert. It may cause some eyeballs to pop. What do you think? Crtew (talk)
Those numbers didn't fact-check. According to the en.wp article (tentatively accepting), an Olympic simming pool is 25 meters by 50 meters, so at about 2 meters' depth that's 2500 cubic meters. So 100 cubic meters would be 4%, and 120–160 cubic meters would be 4.8–6.4%. That honestly doesn't strike me as a useful comparison. :-S  --Pi zero (talk) 20:14, 12 February 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]
The accent in "Australia" goes on the second syllable; seemed like you might be indicating accent on the first syllable. Other than that concern, looks okay to me. --Pi zero (talk) 20:19, 12 February 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Yeah, the 5% line reads okay. --Pi zero (talk) 20:44, 12 February 2014 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Review of revision 2394075 [Passed][edit]