Talk:British dancer and talent show winner Robert Anker dies in car accident aged 27

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Review of revision 4334291 [Passed][edit]

Revision 4334291 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 20:52, 30 July 2017 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • The first two sentences of the third paragraph had a serious copied-from-source problem. Three lengthy passages were verbatim from source, adding up iirc to more than half the text of those two sentences. Reminder: you should use a synthesis writing technique that does not involve copying passages and then modifying them. There is some (compact) advice at WN:PILLARS#own, and discussion at WN:Plagiarism.

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Revision 4334291 of this article has been reviewed by Pi zero (talk · contribs) and has passed its review at 20:52, 30 July 2017 (UTC).[reply]

Comments by reviewer:

  • The first two sentences of the third paragraph had a serious copied-from-source problem. Three lengthy passages were verbatim from source, adding up iirc to more than half the text of those two sentences. Reminder: you should use a synthesis writing technique that does not involve copying passages and then modifying them. There is some (compact) advice at WN:PILLARS#own, and discussion at WN:Plagiarism.
The reviewed revision should automatically have been edited by removing {{Review}} and adding {{Publish}} at the bottom, and the edit sighted; if this did not happen, it may be done manually by a reviewer.

Where, why, how[edit]

The story tells a lot, but not how or why the accident occurred. From [1], photo, it looks like a heads-on collision? Location is described as "Major Mackenzie Drive east of Hwy. 27 shortly after 6 a.m." --Gryllida (talk) 00:09, 1 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

True, it would have been a stronger article with more of those answers. --Pi zero (talk) 01:39, 1 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]
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