User talk:Gryllida
2009, 2010, 2011, 2012, 2013; Add section
Freshman [edit]
Thank you dear friend, Gryllida. It's my first time writing here, I'm a little mixed up but your helps were really effective. Again thank you.--Soroush90gh (talk) 07:08, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
No worries — I also added relevant articles and talk pages to my watchlist to keep track of the progress, so feel free to add questions there and I'd see them. Welcome. Gryllida 07:12, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
Ok dear, so would you just take a look on my two articles, and tell me are they ready to go to review process? or they must be more developed? Thanks a lot--Soroush90gh (talk) 07:15, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
I think the election article is acceptable if you rewrite it to refocus it at the news event — see what article structure is required for publication (especially the headline and the first paragraph content requirements) — while the other one is not fresh anymore; a news event has to have happened within last week but you dated it as May 10. Gryllida 07:19, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
I changed the title to make a hot news and I think the new title is more suitable for Wikinews. I work on the another article. Thank you because of your helps. Can I know your real name and nationality? I'm Soroush (Cyrus) from Iran. Glad to meet you virtually:D--Soroush90gh (talk) 07:28, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
It looks better now; an interesting challenge could be to add the Where, When, Who, Why, What, How questions answers to the first paragraph, also known as "lede", while keeping it as short as possible. Gryllida 08:05, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
Ah, and headlines should be in present tense, and I've just fixed them for you. Gryllida 08:06, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
Thank you Gryllida for your review, I will work on them but I guess it's too late now because they're not hot anymore.--Soroush90gh (talk) 15:06, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
The event was in May 21 which is yesterday (in UTC time) — "fresh" is an event that happened within last week with fresh details within last 2-3 days; please don't worry: I'm sure you'll make it as long as you keep trying, as you have a few more days for this one. --Gryllida 15:29, 22 May 2013 (UTC)
