Talk:Arizona, Florida, Illinois hold 2020 US presidential primaries; Ohio postpones

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  • Not tied to the title, but there are essentially three stories being covered, so its clunky
  • Sourcing notes (not to be construed as suggesting that the sources shouldn't be read in full, but just for help locating where facts are specifically available for verification; most facts are in more than one of the sources, only one listed here)
    1. Primaries in three states, Biden won all: NBC, first sentence
    2. Ohio postponed: NBC, third sentence; Tweets; NBC update titled "Tuesday's pandemic primaries: Everything you need to know" (need to scroll down a lot, its from 3/17 at 11:41 AM PDT), also the one titled "Ohio primary called off at last minute due to health emergency"
    3. Trump is the presumptive nominee: NBC update titled "Trump is now the presumptive GOP nominee, NBC News projects"
    4. Democrats use primaries and caucuses, delegates needed: Bloomberg, Warren end US presidential campaigns following Super Tuesday
    5. 441 delegates: NBC update titled "5 things to watch as Arizona, Florida and Illinois vote during coronavirus mayhem"
    6. Republicans use primaries and caucuses: obvious, wikinews coverage
    7. Republican delegates needed, Trump count, presumptive nominee: The Hill
    8. Biden and Sanders totals: NBC update titled "Biden wins Arizona primary to cap three-state sweep, NBC News projects" (also confirms 1991 delegates needed)
    9. Sanders lost in 2016: NBC update titled "Tuesday's pandemic primaries: Everything you need to know"
    10. Awarded proportionally: In Special:Diff/4553317, the added content is copied verbatim from Bloomberg, Warren end US presidential campaigns following Super Tuesday, which is listed under related news and was used as a source
    11. Ohio postponed: see above (number 2)
    12. Tweets: The Tweets
    13. National Emergency, pandemic: prior coverage at US President Trump declares COVID-19 national emergency, listed as related news and used as a source
    14. Ohio is one of six, DNC urges mail in: NBC, update titled "DNC urges states to stick to primary schedule, adopt vote-by-mail instead"
    15. Klobuchar, bill: NBC, update titled "As pandemic throws elections into chaos, advocates call for national vote-by-mail"
    16. Maryland rescheduling: NBC, update titled "While Maryland delays primary, special election to replace Cummings will stay mail-in only"
    17. Cummings death: US Representative Elijah Cummings dies at age 68
    18. Klobuchar was a candidate: Prior wikinews coverage in Super Tuesday article

--DannyS712 (talk) 19:31, 18 March 2020 (UTC)Reply

The article needs to have a focus. Not three foci. I could fix the headline (we've always been more flexible about reviewers changing headlines); the question is whether the lede will then sufficiently match the headline, or could then be made to match the headline with a very small tweak. --Pi zero (talk) 03:19, 19 March 2020 (UTC)Reply
Okay, I've tried something. --Pi zero (talk) 03:31, 19 March 2020 (UTC)Reply
If you're on IRC we can coordinate --DannyS712 (talk) 03:32, 19 March 2020 (UTC)Reply
I like the new title. I'm not a fan of the "United States state" construction. Darkfrog24 (talk) 21:27, 20 March 2020 (UTC)Reply
"US state" isn't as bad as "United States state", but I wasn't enthused about using it in a headline, let alone at the start of a headline. It just doesn't feel as succinct as one wants a headline to be. --Pi zero (talk) 21:56, 20 March 2020 (UTC)Reply

Review of revision 4553858 [Passed]

Thanks --DannyS712 (talk) 22:14, 20 March 2020 (UTC)Reply